I come to you,
with scars on mii wrist,
but I promise, this is the last night I feel like this
I just came to say I'm fine
I promise I'll be alright
but you know it's a lie
Mii parents say everything mii fault
they don't know me like you do
but they don't know me at all
I'm so sick of them saying its just a phase
They think I'll be okay
but you know its a lie
just let me go
I promise I'll be fine
as long as I'm away from here
And I just came to say goodbye
I promise I'll be alright
but you know its a lie...
Author notes
This is really how I feel
A contest entry
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3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1642 entries
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I really liked this;; the darkness and everything was incredible. It was a very deep and emotional poem, and I'm sorry you feel this way.
"I'm so sick of them saying its just a phase
They think I'll be okay
but you know its a lie"
Favorite linnnes ever =) Especially the first line. Ahmazinggg. Thanks for sharing this;; I know I've felt remotely close to this before. Great write<333
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This is a great poem and it gets the point across about how you feel.
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Awesome
Wow!
This is deep.
I've been in such situtions.
But this is really good,
just don't do anything to permintly hurt yourself.
That wouldn't be good at all.
Not trying to tell you what to do,
but yeahh.
I use to cut and I know the feelings.
But this is really good.
Great job.
[♥]Kelsea
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real nice
this is real nice, there are lots of things we lie about. some of us hve bad health and when someone ask how you are .you just say i'm fine.yes a broken heart and trying to say your fine when your not.some know you well enough to know it's just a lie. parents don't want to understand or forget how things can be.good job and nice flow.sorry i'm out of comment points -
wow
wow,
i love the poem
the emotion portrayed by your words
very deep
moving
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And I just came to say goodbye
I promise I'll be alright
but you know its a lie...
i'm speechless, this is a very sad write...
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how very sad that anyone would feel this way. i hope that life gets better for you soon. thank you for sharing your heart with me through your writing. viyanna rosemarie
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