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Marked

We were together
but half-way broken up
because of your drinking
and doing drugs.

I got marked
one day at school.
Your friends freaked out
but you thought it was cool.

You fell in the street.
Your hands are bleeding.
Is that a new cologne?

I resisted drinking.

 

My parents freaked out too.

I went to grandma's house.

I tripped and fell unconscious.

My spirit flying into a crack fit for a mouse.

 

Meeting the goddess Nyx

i am now her eyes and ears.

Kissing my forehead

my mark filled out, suppressing my fears.

 

I will not die now.

I'm at the House of Night

Vampire finishing school

where classes are overnight.

Author notes

this poem is actually based on the first part of a book called Marked by P.C. Cast and her daughter Kristen Cast. It is about a girl named Zoey whose main problems in life were a big geometry test and how to cope with her mom's new husband. her only escape routes from these problems were her life at school and her Grandma Redbird's lavender farm. The day before the test, a tracker sent from the House of Night, a Vampire Finishing School near downtown Tulsa OK., has marked Zoey. She now has an outline of a cresant moon on her forehead. the second stanza tells you what her almost-ex-boyfriend, Heath, thinks about it as well as his friends Dustin and Drew. her best friend Kayla was afraid of her so going to her was out. after facing the "step-loser" of a step dad, she goes to Grandma's house. there she falls unconscious. her spirit flies into a crack near where she has fallen and she meets the Vampire Goddess Nyx (if you read my poem before this one it tells you most things about Nyx and the rituals that the vamps perform to worship her.) Nyx kisses her on the forehead and tells Zoey that she is Nyx's eyes and ears. Her cresant moon is now filled in. Go to your nearest book store and look for the series! the next two books are Betrayed and Chosen!

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  • Torchwood
    November 30, 2008
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    well dun and good luk


  • falling1isfatal2
    June 28, 2008

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    You totally made me want to go out and get this book! I love this it's just so thought provoking! I will definetly go read the book now


  • maybeillgohome
    June 26, 2008
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    good imagery. great job!


  • xxhoopstar21xx
    June 17, 2008

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    wow!!! this is soo awesome!!!! and by marked what do you mean? when i think of marked i usually depending on the situation of a ink pen of some sort of the mark of the best 666. can i make one small sugestion tho?? on line 12 you said "is that new cologne?" cologne as in the spray for guys? cuz if it is i really dont see a fit in there and when i read that part i thought first maybe cologne as in guy spray you know. hope that didnt sound mean!! i always make suggestions and when i do i say it nicely and mean it nicely!!! but overall in this poem i would have to say it would be a 7 out of ten. k hope that didn't sound mean. (if i cud i would give u a 10 but u have to go by everything in the poem). great job! the flow goes well and the story fits together in this sort of short poem. the imergry is great!!!!

    Your lil sis,
    silverwolf


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Synopis of the book
    was really good, you have a great imagination babe.
    Keep on penning because it will get published one day.
    you are a tallent!
    Dolores xx


  • Beauty Of Silence
    June 14, 2008

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    this was interesting... i like the whole idea of this poem... i love the way this poem told a story, yet in a poetic way! >.< Awesome job... and u kept me captivated till the very end! i love it! keep penning!

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