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[Stupid Little Girl]

I tired to erase who you pretend to be,
you always used to tell me,
you're horrible, I hate you, you stupid little girl,
and then all I wanted to do is flee.

You crush everything that I knew,
you hit me to prove a point,
and then with the energy you had left you'd yell,
you're horrible, I hate you, you stupid little girl,
I can't handle you anymore.

 

You lie to others,

put up your fake front,

it don't fool me no more,

cause I aint gonna take it another day,

you're horrible, I hate you, you stupid little girl,

you mistreated my love.

 

I was real and true,

always to you,

but you could never tell,

all you saw was your daughter and the words you had said,

you're horrible, I hate you, you stupid little girl,

don't bother coming home again.

 

Well I got news for you,

I aint living here no more,

cause I'm not your,

your horrible, I hate you, you stupid little girl,

anymore.

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Ok this is an old poem but I had to put in my prompt so this part is new I chooce prompt 4...

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  • Davidlee
    July 23, 2008
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    I like it a bunch very very good!


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 6, 2008

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    Whoaaa. This is so powerful & full of hate and anger and frustration. I love it. Absolutely incredible. You have such a way with words that is captivating.

    "cause I'm not your,
    your horrible, I hate you, you stupid little girl,
    anymore."

    LOVED those lines. So full of attitude and agitation. Excellent write. Thank you so much for entering & best of luck to you ! ♥


  • Zenda-Lokki silver member
    June 14, 2008

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    A great poem with good use of the repeats. You're stronger than you think and flourish into the wonderful person I know you to be.


    • HiddenByTheDark
      June 16, 2008
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      By the way it wasn't supposed to be a poem it was ment to be a song but thanks
      ♥always Kat