perfect in her flaws
she's pretty as can be
withdrawing from the world because
she hides a secret you can't see.
a battle with her mind
her mirror tells her that she's fat
her body screams for food declined
she can't see her bodies flat.
media makes her worse
as skinny is oh-so pretty
soon she will need a hears
all she gets is pitty.
she can't see she's dying
she doesn't know she's sick
she can't stop her crying
she wants to be a blip.
people will make fun
they will say she's fat
they have no idea of what they've done
they've hit her with a bat.
she'll smile say she's eating
she'll laugh and scream and sing
little do they know she's cheating
she can throw up and show a grin.
Author notes
its kinda true.
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the last stanza is the most powerful i lveo it xxx
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i went through a stage of not eating myself, got down to less than a size six.
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im not usually into rhymes,and i found not much genuineness in this poem,your author notes says its kinda true,im not sure if that means your just not acostum to puring you emotions of this topic down or your just writing out of something other than personal experience,butthis could be a bit more powerful.
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powerful
i really liked this
"she'll smile say she's eating
she'll laugh and scream and sing
little do they know she's cheating
she can throw up and show a grin."
those were my favorite lines...i liked them all but those to me say she can lie and make people believe her cuz she'll act happy she'll be her normal happy self and even wen she has to eat in front of people she can throw up and smile and no one will even know
idk if that's what you thought when you wrote it but that's just waht i got out of those lines, and i think that's why i like them so much...sometimes i HAVE to eat infront of my parents or friends or something and then i can go throw up and no one even expects anything for the fact of i can wear a smile and act happy for the most part and then when i'm alone i can let it all out...ya know?
but anyways great write!
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