Oh God
since long I am voyaging
I am aiming you here and there
determining to make you comprehend
that I belong to you
although, time and again
I discovered myself in the middle-of-the-road
I could never obtain your castle
neither your residence
nor your fair
and now my subsisting proviso is very shabby
since after stumbling in locating your campus
I even stumbled to get back into the intentness of my own quarter
Oh God...
In a list
A contest entry
- "Where you are" by Grey Mouser.
700 points, ended June 19, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I had to chuckle!
A wonderful pen with a bit of humor, a new side of you my dear friend. Refreshing as always.
Congratulations on the honorable mention!
Yours truly,
Jennifer
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Very nicely written spiritual piece, finding one questing to gain the promise that is, yet struggling the while to attain. Thanks for entering into the contest.
Be well and be blessed,
Mouser -
Wonderful piece my friend. so powerful...I love your spiritual writes they say so much about the person you are inside...great job indeed
Ruby
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This has so much humility built in. I'm sure that God is pleased to see you in this particular frame of mind, my friend.
I enjoy your spiritual poetry.
Paul
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For me this brings to mind three quotes in this order in the poem:
'Remember Me and I will remember you.'
'It is from Him that they come and it is to Him that they return'.
'Every day He is in a business'.
Thank you again, for reminding us of such humility, strength and way of sharing.
Sol
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Wow! I am in awe over this verse!
You are so right we sometime find ourselves in the middle, stuggling,sitting on the fence so to speak.
I find myself in this verse and all i can do is pray for God to help me go the right way.
Very thought provoking write!
love,
~Lisa~
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