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At Night

Let the waves crash on the shore
My outer shell is gone
So I don't even care anymore
About the rest of the wolrd
Cause this is where I want to be
This is the real me
Untamed and wild in the moon
Watching the waters sway my heart
From the start I always wanted to be your girl
And let the nights rule me and teach me
I'm drawn to the saftey
As the dark arms surround me
This is where I want to be
With nothing else but this night
And the waves that make themselves known
Yet I feel like I'm waiting
Wanting to share this night with another
Another lover of the darkness
Just to share this moment
I'll offer out my hand
Deeper into the night we go
Welcome to this feeling
Something thats familiar and calming
Arousing the sences and my body
Are you another like me
Loving the night and all about it
Can I share this with you
Sharing the night any way we want to
With the sound of waves at our feet
And the rest of the world where it is
Dead to the life that the night can bring
But thats their loss
The moon shines on your face
I'm stuck staring silently
As your nightly beauty unfolds
My heart is losing all control
A little voice inside my head is saying "I found you"

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  • Blueisacolour
    June 14, 2008

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    Oh, wow. This was really pretty. The overall feel of this piece is fuzzy and warm. I can just imagine someone sitting by the seaside, and this being softly said in the background.

    You've touched a really delicate chord with this piece. What I really liked is the fact that you touched the chord just the right way- Not too hard nor too lightly. It was perfect.

    If you improved on form and punctuation, this would make for a brilliant piece!
    =]

    Keep writing!
    <3!