When the lights are turned down low
And I don't understand
All the things that I've dreamed
You're slipping in between
Me and my big dreams
It's always you in my dreams
And you're restless
And you tell me
That it's over
You've got to get out
You can't stand to see me shaking
No it's not like that
instead, could you let me go?
I didn't think so
and you don't want me to be here with your future
So you say
"your past is just a stupid
Interruption to our present"
And you don't want me to be much closer
'Cause you're afraid to find out all this hope
You had sent into the sky by now had.... crashed
and it did because of me
I had these hopes
And turned it to a passion
Playing this guitar
Singing, while thinking of you
Maybe I would cross the country
Become an artist
And there was hope in me
That I could take you there
Wherever you want to go
But I don't think you care
and if I hurt you then i'm sorry
please don't think that this was easy
And she is walking down the stairs
Doesn't she look good
Standing in her dress?
And I was thinking
You slipped in my dreams
And it doesn't get me anywhere
She came walking down the stairs
And all that I could do
Was touch her long blonde hair
And I've been thinking
It hurts me, thinking
My dreams of you got me no where
This is because I can spell heartbreak well
And I can like it
It's to dreaming of dying in anothers arms
and why i want to try it
It's to you who has slipped in my dreams
and those first nights in my car
when we first saw the stars together
may not be happening again
'Cause I'm not your star
Isn't that what you said?
Isn't that what you said?
And if this is what it takes
just to lie with my mistakes
And delude my mind thinking of every girl
reminds me of you
and live with what you did to me
All the hell you put me through
I always catch the clock it's 1:43am
Now i'm awake and its hard to sleep
but it's not hard to dream
You'll always slipped in my dreams
They'll never hurt me like you do
No, They'll never hurt me like you do
No, No, No, No, No, No, No, No, No
This is to a girl who got into my head
with all the pretty things she did
Hey, You know, you keep me up in bed
This is to a girl who got into my head
with all these fucked up things she did
Hey maybe baby, you could keep me up in bed
Spin around me like a dream
You slipped in my dream
And I said
Did you know I miss you
Did you know I miss you
Did you know I miss you
I miss you!
Then I'll go to sleep
But not alone
Not alone anymore
I'll be with you in my dreams
And then you'll kiss me in my dreams
I know you miss me in my dreams
I dream of crying for you
I dream of crying for you
I dream of crying for you
I wake up
and i'm soaked with tears
This happens every time
You slipped in my dreams
Author notes
LoveDeprived - Kara(im a guy, IDK! what were my parents thinking)
sorry if it was too long, this actually happened to me, when i sleep i usually dream of her and etc2x as explain/depicted by the write, and what i feel, so i hope you like it
A contest entry
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Comments
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Amazing poem it's so sad I loved it tho I could really feel the emotion in it
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heartfelt
i feel the heart break
good luck
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I'm just going to assume these are lyrics? If not, then you might consider song-writing.
I think you have written a piece that is very easy to identify with; I, for one, know that I still dream about a certain someone much more than I'd like.
I do like imagery so I did miss that a bit, but at the same time I have to commend you for writing something so accessible to the average person.
Thank you for your entry! -
This is a great poem, Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck,
♥ Christina -
I like it
except
"Me and my big dreams
It's always you in my big dreams"
- I think 'big dreams' right here is too repetitive. Maybe it should just be 'dreams' instead of 'big dreams' in the second line.
Or maybe it's just me- who knows?
Good luck in the contest.
♥
~Princess of Shadows~ -
OMGOSH! it crushed me to read this horrifyingly sad poem! There were so many parts of this poem that left me breathless... your pain is just unbearable! >.< I like the repetitions... it just brings this poem to live! Well, what can i say about your emotions... they were raw and really strong, coz it made the reader feel the hurt that's killing you!
This was long, but worth the read!
'Cause I'm not your star
Isn't that what you said?
I was like... oh boy, this is so so so sad! it was just heart-breaking to read this! This poem was just so straight foward! Such an honest and genuine feeling for this gal you have! >.< amazingly deep write >.< left my eyes welled up with tears... keep writing kays, and keep the faith alive!
~RANJI
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Great write, the verses were very unique and i soaked in this poem stayed for awhile and had some tea..great write!
Love
Aurua
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This is brilliant. full of emotion, i almost cried! excellent write.
~lae xxx
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this is very good
I am so glad I read it, there is so much there that I can relate to - the wanting of someone - the need to be wanted - loved it
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