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It was four
in a world of afternoon,
and I
can see linebreaks --
perfectly painted
in the facade
of your clouded face,
as an abstract
expense of dizziness.
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Author notes
Cheap wine
A contest entry
- summer is for the sky by grass.
533 points, ended July 7, 2008, 13 entries
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This is beautiful and all, but it leaves me wanting more.
You can take that any way you want it.
I like your take on the prompt, though. It's all really interesting.
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I missed your poetry; so great to see a new one from your pen.
This one made me smile - I've never seen cheap wine written this way. Wonderful!!
~ Nicolette
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lol....cheap wine will definately do this....esp. by four in the afternoon..., Hensley
I love this...I miss your poetry...
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