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Shes Hurting

He didnt care..He never did..he never will..
She looked at him with tears in her eyes..
her eyeliner running..
hes broken her heart so many times before..
but she keeps running back to him..
He didnt care..He never did..he never will..
Did he not know that she had feelings too?
She felt like he just stabbed her in the chest..
he hurt her so much..but..
He didnt care..he never did..he never will..
Her life just fell apart before her eyes..
Thats what happens when you make someone your everything..
now she sees him..with his new girlfriend..
they always seem so happy..

It Feels like hes slowly turning the knife in her chest.
He didnt care..he never did..he never will..

Can you relate to this?

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  • Lonely Christina
    June 16, 2008
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    this is a sucky thing to go thru...but it happens, alot. keep up the good work
    xoxo- christina


  • Mistress Masquerade
    June 15, 2008

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    I know the pain of seeing him with someone new.. The repition is perfect and I love your writing style, the way you use puncuation is unique and I greatly enjoyed reading this. You've started off with a bang. =)


  • peridotPixi
    June 15, 2008

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    i really love the picture you have used with this poem, i love the repetiveness it didnt get too anoying as when it is over used, its nice to see another wonderful skilled young poet around, this poem speaks deeply and i know that many girls can realate to this, i've been threw it many years ago, but i caused him pain also, seeing him with the other girl still broke my heart, keep up the beautiful writing, ~Amy


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Welcome to All Poetry

    this is such a beautiful write written almost as if a tale of time. The emotions and sandess that drips throughout the lines is gripping to the point that the reader can feel the torment and pain in each line. it is a story that many will be able to reflect upon and connect with and you have penned it so amazingly. the repitition really emphasizing the fact he did not care. well done

    Charlotte
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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    June 14, 2008
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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    The repetition of "He didnt care..he never did..he never will" helps bring the emotions up to force for the reader.
    Great poem

    ♥
    Enjoy AllPoetry
    Stay safe
    ~Manda
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