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Under the Ribs ~ Memoir Journal

 

Under the Ribs (prose) is published in the Memoir Journal Vol. 1 No. 2

 

http://memoirjournal.squarespace.com/table-of-contents-summer08/

 

It is not like anything I have published here.  Scroll down to the prose
area click on the piece to read it or you may use this link.

http://memoirjournal.squarespace.com/under-the-ribs/

 

Or you can access it from the news link at my web site:

 

http://www.zayrayves.com/news.html

 

It has adult content and is graphic but not erotic.
Thank you again to everyone here for their support! 

~ zayra yves

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  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    July 30

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    This was so painful, Z and beautifully written.

    It's so heartbreaking to know this is reality for so many little ones. Thank you for sharing your heart.


  • paulcreates silver member
    June 30
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    ..I made myself read all the way to the bitter end..

    beyond sad.

    Stunning write Zayra.

    Paul


  • Quiet places
    June 21

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    Reality Bites

    The intensity of this story drew me in with tearful thoughts as I read. Life chosen for a child that should never be. Death is welcome although this sadness goes on. A very expressive write that all should read and hug their children. On the other hand there really needs to be a special hell for the parents that do this to their children. Outstanding writing about this subject matter even though it hurts. Don


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    June 16

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    nothing I could say, could, or would

    do that justice





  • Rowan gold member
    June 15

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    Like watching a train wreck- horrifying yet I couldn't stop reading/seeing it all in my mind. So sad, and brutally raw, Zayra. Thanks for sharing this with us.


  • suseann
    June 15

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    Riviting and all too real. Sad,that a childs mind has to attempt to survive real madness.This shows depth in story line as well as the writer's powerful pen in creating.


  • transcendental baby gold member
    June 14

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    You have such an amazing talent for exciting the starkest emotions from your readers with just a simple story told with the depth of real screeching life ... both in the body's physical environment and in the depths of the mind's inner world ... Man, I wish I could do that


  • ardentMarch gold member
    June 14

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    these are the kinds of poems I read that make me an absolute mess, weepy & hating the world for weeks. Oh, Zayra....god..how I hope this poem changes the world in some small ways that equal to a whole lot. It is so sad to think of children in this environment & yet there are still soooo many. This HURTS to read...and it is more powerful than anything I've ever read before.
    Congratulations.....


  • LadyUnique silver member
    June 14

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    this is one of the few times i've read something that brought me to tears. i'm really stunned at such powerful words and how you've captured a child's point of view. your writing is pure.


  • ferg silver member
    June 14

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    Gut wrenching

    This was painful to read yet I did so with morbid fascination. I recall visiting San Francisco in the 70's with friends from San Jose and being totally oblivious to the brutal realities of that drug culture. Young and naive, with no concept of what actually goes on in the underbelly of that world beyond the idealistic love and peace milieu that I was so smitten and mesmerized by.

    There is an exquisite beauty in this painful write. The beautiful innocense juxtaposed against the dire setting, the eyelashes that take on names and personas for the destitute child, your impeccable writing style of your gut wrenching truth.

    As a father my heart aches for the child that must endure this, and I do understand that stories like this and worse are unfolding every minute of the day. I salute you for penning this.

    Much repsect,

    Henri


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 14

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    The story you wrote touched me in the deepest part...under my ribs too. The title is perfect... You know I understand the story within or behind the story...the story of so many children.

    Beautifully written - it really is something special, Zayra.

    Congrats on the publication, my friend. You are going places and I'm so happy for you.



    ~ Nicolette


  • arafura
    June 14

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    Under the Ribs is a great title. It felt like a knife under the ribs reading that... you are a fine writer in a numberof genres my friend. BRAVO!


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 14

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    ♥ ♥ ♥


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 13

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    Oh my - want to stop reading because it is so terrible to think about what is happening to a child here, yet it is so gripping that I had to read on till the end. Wanted to cry, the pain one feels here is deep and yet the will of children is strong, the resilience is mighty and somehow they grow up and out of this into something hopefully better. Then maybe again the cycle continues and nothing changes.
    Amazing story you share here - gut wrenching and mind boggling.
    Congratulations on this publication.

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