Under a cloud of grey
where warmth momentarily fades;
thoughts of him heats her soul
knowing soon she'll get revenge.
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A contest entry
- 10/20/30 Another Quickie by Nighttime angel.
725 points, ended June 14, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me your Gold....I will give you another Gold!!!! by Sweet Sorrow.
420 points, ended June 20, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such emotions displayed with this short little piece. Excellent write and thank you for sharing
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Wonderful
Terrific creation. So deserving of the gold. Congratulations. -
Congrats on the gold win
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well done on winning the GOLD cara..xxx
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Outstanding!
Such emotion! Well deserving of the Gold! Congrats! Don
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Deep
Very deep take on that picture, cuz. Fine work.
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Wow my daughter
What strong and powerful thoughts behind this one
that your words pen. Amazing!!!
And a well deserved gold
Mum xx
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Good Job
Quick thinking and a nice reverse take of the seemingly obvious.
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Wow!
Nice take on the prompt kiddo! Watch out for the Cara karate! Glad you got the gold. Nice metaphor & imagery. 4 lines that speak volumes!
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well done on gold cara. hell hath no fury loke a woman scorned xx
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Vengeful!
Well done...I see you grabbed gold for this..congrats! All worth it!
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ohh so deep and strong, a lot with a small amount of words, well done...and cool trippy background too
Cin
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ooohhh remind me not to make you upset.. okay?
I love your take on the prompt, absolutely love it. the last two lines are quite powerful and says a lot.
excellent take on the prompt.
good luck
kat
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I like the surging back and forth of heat and cold, thoughts of him (from those dangling hearts) and the plan she's hatching *evil laughing, under her breath* Nice extension from the prompt.
Marlene -
Great write. I never thought about revenge. Good Luck
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"under a cloud of grey; where warmth momentarily fades" - LOVE those lines. and it flows beautifully. and i would hate to be him! lol. Good Luck dear
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ooh, very nice
i like that ending
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Wonderful
Very creative take on the image. Best of luck in the contest.
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ouch, i'd hate to be him! nicely done!
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do re mi fa so la ti do!
lol -
...oh, I thought "me me me" was you practicing your scales, singing
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