My heart dances to a turbulent beat
in the small hours of the night, aroused from my sleep
passions heat, blue white courses through me, such zeal,
terrifies, excites, caught within a slipstream of exotic thoughts, I feel
alive as you weave a sophisticated trail of intense pleasure
across the simple lines of my curves, teasing me into an erotic fervor
Author notes
Word bank Turbulent Exotic Simple
Sophisticated Blue Night Small
Terrify Slipstream Zeal
In a list
A contest entry
- my first word list contest by patsoldcat.
700 points, ended June 27, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #128 One for the Ladies (Adult only please) by daviscth.
300 points, ended September 4, 2008, 3 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Quite intoxicating and shiveringly passionate. That you created this gem from a word bank makes it even more amazing! Kudos!
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Thank you for reading and commenting
truly appreciated
~sugar~
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This is a wonderfully created poem and goes so well with the picture prompt. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for posting.
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Thank you for your comment
Valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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A winner!
A well written word bank that has a lovely erotic feel to it. May you do well in your contest. The last two lines are quite poetic, "as you weave a sophisticated trail of intense pleasure across the simple lines of my curves, teasing me into an erotic fervor."
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final read
great use of the word bank. passionate and moving write.
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Thank you so much
Value and appreciate your comment
~sugar~
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first read
thank you for entering.
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You're welcome.
~sugar~
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Words so beautifully penned
Sensual and elegant
This art work I adore and have done a contest with this piece
Good luck
Julie
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Thank you Julie,
I love this pic too. It is your contest I first saw it in and thought it went well.
Appreciate you reading and commenting
~sugar~
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Super sensual write
I wish you the best in the contest SIS its a wonderful and passionate piece of art. But I could not expect any less from you. Much love SIS LISA
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Thank you Lisa for your lovely comment
Always a pleasure to have you stop by
Much love ~sugar~
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*whistles in amazement*
Seductive words here, sis. Romantic in a tasteful way. Fine work.
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I thought I would cool it a bit bro...I would hate to be the death of ya with all the *THUD* *GASP* that i so often get from you.
Appreciate you reading as always
~sugar~
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wow hon very sensual i see we stop being raw for a while it seems no one can handle us that way
and this way either hon i think you will win over cat with this one
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LOL!! I like that
A fab comment from you as always sis
Appreciate you always
~sugar~
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Stunning piece of writing here. I don't write erotic pieces, but hell, this was a one-of-a-kind. Brilliant imagery here. Well done. Good luck in the contest Sugar.
With
Dark
Love
Wayne Leon
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Thanks sweetie, for your fab comment
it means a lot.
It could only be 6 lines long
I appreciate you always.
With Dark Love
~sugar~xxx
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This is a favorite in my eyes sis
I loved the image in this entry. Very passionate.
Good luck, sweetheart.
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Sissy..you hiding get ya magic cloak off
hand on hip tapping foot. 
Thanks hon, I appreciate you to the max
It's always a pleasure to share with you.
~sugarcookie~
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