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Finding Possession

I have wrestled in fits of sun
with the noise of desire
and the voice of Spirit’s guide,
present through generations.

‘Til darkness descends,
rescinding daylight's hounding bustle,
relieving senses of all but necessary perception--
and in that blessed silence
songs of night resound. . .

Suddenly I hear my own breath.

Then,


a cricket bows a tune composed

by his kin
outside my grandmother’s window
while the night wind,

that also brushed her evening’s panes
whispering of faith,
passes now by mine

(its beginning, unknown;  its destiny, every place).

 I incline attentive ear,

discovering softly

the cricket song
dancing wildly against the stillness,
pursuing passion with abandon

 

and the wind gently grazing the glass
in perfect restraint
instead of bursting through.

 

In those moments,

moonlight brings discernment
and I learn

 

to balance truths.







Author notes

Prompt:  SILENCE By Lucian Blaga
http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/show/118936-Lucian-Blaga-Silence

 and in particular the phrase "the pleasure of living torn."

 

 

 

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  • sticksnstones
    September 7

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    Wonderful

    right off the bat, there's a certain elegance about this piece as if it were dancing across the page. The wonderful imagery used made me not want this piece to ever end. You are truly an amazing writer, and thanks so much for your input on my poem.

  • Wow

    amazing imagery!"the cricket song
    dancing wildly against the stillness,
    pursuing passion with abandon" "while the night wind,
    that also brushed her evening’s panes
    whispering of faith,
    passes now by mine"
    (its beginning, unknown; its destiny, every place)."
    Just beautiful!

  • Michael P
    July 8

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    wow this is excellent-you know i live poetry of balance: "and the wind gently grazing the glass
    in perfect restraint
    instead of bursting through."-I loved the balance of this verse and the way you set it up finding the reasoning between the silene of night and the bustling day-by listening to the noises in the night, superbly written-passion, discernments, truths...peace

  • nsmurty
    June 22

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    there is lyrical beauty and grace in this poem. there is no burden of extra syllables. poem just flows like the cricket song wildly against the stillness of heart with perfect restraint. just beautiful
  • Congratulations

    You know I loved this. Well done. Congratulations on your super silver. Excellent piece. ~Pamela
  • I love this! I chose your name out of the list, and then went to this poem first, the most recent. I love cicadas too! They're really really amazing creatures. I look forward to reading more of your thoughts on them, you seem to be very astute.
    <3
    HCP

  • Bravo! Standing in applause!



    Oh my my my goodness this is good. I loved the beautiful images that your words presented, softly, quickly, up and down... (perfectly laid out) and with such subtle internal rhyme...

    The piece simply sung to me. How utterly wonderful! I am so glad to have read this today. Excellent poetry - as it was meant to be enjoyed. ~Pamela

  • Uh........... Wow!

    This is fabulously written. What a great balancing act you have penned here. The struggle is very well expressed. I can feel the strain between the passion and Spirit, the flesh and spirit.

    Imagery is expertly used. The image of that little cricket after all that hustle and bustle really brings down the clamour and focus onto something small and concrete yet artful. I love how you intertwine the cricket's song with the image of the night wind. This is done so simply and so very skillfully-- perfectly.

    There so much beauty and depth to this piece. My favorite lines:

    whispering of faith,
    passes now by mine

    (its beginning, unknown; its destiny, every place).

    Wow! That line "its beginning, unknown; its destiny, every place" is astonishining, touching the divine in it's penetration of mystery and depth. It really lingers with me after reading the poem.

    Then there is that little cricket now seemily growing in power as his song is now "dancing wildly against the stillness". His passion is a kind of defiance. I love the word "against" in that line.

    The conclusion is profound and.... satisfying. Profound in its wisdom and satisfying in its aquisition of that wisdom.

    I love this poem. It is simply brilliant and brilliantly beautiful; a top tier poem of a top tier poet.


  • Gaze silver member
    June 14

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    Wonderful poem!
    It caught my fully attention from first till very last line. The way you made it evolve from dark to light and all the imageries in between is so very well done.
    I've read other of your poems in similar contests, and must say that you seem to absorb the 'old' poets thoughts and bring a wonderful interpretation of your own.
    Again, very well done with this most enjoyable poem.

    Mari

  • This is a gorgous evocative poem...I messaged you with a couple of things.... is there ever silence; physically, intellectually, emotionally and spiritually? I think not, as you pen..... such beautiful quiet.


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 14

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    you have taken 'silence' and done it justice. This is quite simply a beautiful write, leaving this reader smiling. I wish you well in the contest, my friend. Love, Lane

  • Oh hun this is spectacular. 'to balance truths' is such a fitting ending to all the thoughts you have penned in this. You have captured silence resounding throughout time and the universe so beautifully.
    All the very best with this
    Gaylene


  • Cannonsfire silver member
    June 14

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    Within every silence there is beauty the ear can hear...lol not famous just me coining a quote. For it is in these small moments that we acclimatise to ourselves and the sounds the world drowns out each day. We listen to that inner being in us all and if we are wise we will continue to find those spaces and listen harder. There is beauty in all around us to hear and to see. This is soft and wise dear poet. Love, Chez (Sheila!)


  • Peteskid gold member
    June 13

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    The imagery is well done with darkness, moonlight, and night sounds all having a turn in carrying the steady mood, introspection and reflection; we learn as silence fills and drips by drops into conciousness. A meaning found in some of the great classics done in connotation here and very well done. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK

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