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Redemption

Weak from the eternal
struggle within the immortal
depths of the soul.

Answer-less in the
controversy
between life and death.

Torture left in a code of remorse

agonized in fear
lies to the eyes of the enshrined.

 

The doubted left

in a grave alone yet full

of the daemon.

 

All the world knows

is the regret for

a simple yet tragic

life of nonexistence.

 

The giver watches all

with the eye of redemption

as a fallen angel

makes a final mark of envy

 

And slips in to a world

of evil and greed,

and looks back on the world

 

and says

goodbye...

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  • Blessed-Be
    November 17, 2008
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    wow this is such a great poem


  • FireBurnsAlone
    June 14, 2008

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    Reminds me of yesterday..

    This reminds me of last night, when some crazy bible-freak tried to convert me. Haha, not happening. This poem seems different from your other ones, maybe it's the formatting, or the expressions used. The title fits it well. Another thing i liked, is that you used the "tragic yet simple". It makes me think lots