Oh whisper sweet within your garden green,
dear purple martin and soft mourning dove
amid the iris and the tall foxglove;
your secrets are with wonder, seldom seen.
Your scratch and peck sing with diversity
in surface dance that melds your gentle love
and nurtures those still bound by bourgeoisie.
In a list
A contest entry
- Form Challenge by micol.
1050 points, ended July 1, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a wonderful little Sonnette you have written here.The beauty of nature and the songs they sing in the garden green
Exellent imagery within your penning here.
Alway's a joy to read your poetry.
Tony
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Tony
Thank you so much for stopping by to read and leave your impressions. I am pleased you enjoyed this sonnette. A fun little form to be sure.
Thank you again. ~Pamela 
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Oh, I am happy to be reminded of this form through your wonderful list, Pamela. Purple martin, mourning dove, iris and foxglove - all my faves and set the tone for me to return to my beloved fish camp in the Adirondacks soon, where I'll see Flyrod Crosby once again.
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Thank you so much. I found the form enchanting and now I want to write another. Thank you for the gentle reminder and again, the smile I get knowing you enjoyed Flyrod Crosby so much. I loved writing that piece for you. Thank you. ~Pamela 
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The piece touched me with its musicality...particularly appropriate to subject and content. The visuals in the quatrain work well to communicate the poem's essence. Thank you for submitting.
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micol
Thank you so much for your kind words and a wonderful contest. I learned a nice new form. ~Pamela
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SERENE AND LOVELY IMAGERY,
PEACEFUL NATURE
SOMETHING WE SHOULD ASPIRE TO.
BEAUTIFUL
GOD BLESS...
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Very nice imagery and excellent sonnette form. I enjoyed the use of purple martin, mourning dove,iris and fox glove. Beautifully done. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest.
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100% iambic meter delivers dignity.
I like your pairs in the quatrain: martin, dove and iris with foxglove. Nicely done.
The poem begins as an apostrophe of address to the two birds you admire, in their natural element, I might add.
The dreaded sameness and materialism of the 'bourgeoisie'! Kill it with "Diversity".
Thank you, Pamela. Lovely poem. Alliteration used to good effect and perfect form.
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I really like this, especially the first four lines--beautiful!
Best of luck,
Bill
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Perhaps the bird is free but only able to fly upon the surface of the wind and spend time caught in chasing bugs. Often the most mundane hid much that is torrid and full of love. Though if I was a bird I am sure your garden would attract a visit from a simple fool like me.
Love, Tom B.
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Ah. C'est magnifique ...
and I think this is about far more than a garden.
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such a beautiful garden you've described here. absolutely beautiful! =D
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Lovely gentle garden poetry, looks this form really works rather well.
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This is a lovely, gentle look at a garden, flowering with life and sound.
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