like electricity
when negative is positive
attraction
satisfaction drains me
A contest entry
- 500 points for 10 words by Unsigned.
950 points, ended June 15, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is very beautiful..it brings me back to science class...i remember that lesson about how things attract...great poem! i wish you all the best of luck in the contest!
~NeeCee -
the electrical drain
powerful yet energy deflating lol.
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Wow, you have drained me hahahaha good luck in the contest for sure lol
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The comparison of love to electricity is an extremely accurate one, for love is quite captivating and powerful.
However, I wasn't convinced by the poem very much. I guess scientific jargon isn't my idea of "sweet talk".
Overall, good write.
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oh this is a great take on the prompt i love the feelings and the creativity you have used here ion, like electricity, that is really cool, this poem says so much in 10 short words, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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Kudoes to one who can describe love and lust in terms of nuclear physics. (g)
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cool!
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I really like this a lot. Great job.*smiles*
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Using atomic language to define an emotion like this? Well, most people say that opposite poles attract themselves. Liked the vocabulary there.
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Yes satisfaction can be oh so draining...
I like this it is different to the others...
Simon
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this works! not much to say to 10 words placed in a manner thatt works the prompt to a point of sharp effect. Again nicely transcribed and good luck in the contest... I might have to give the other 30 worder a go
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I hope that you do that...
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