Strangle my starvation
Sharing warmth
Loosening ourselves into eternity
Beyond
Author notes
10 words about love. I wonder if it fits.
A contest entry
- 500 points for 10 words by Unsigned.
950 points, ended June 15, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh wow this was freaking amazing! i loved it! i wish you all the best of luck in the contest!
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Nicely melded words and some excellent alliteration.
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interesting take
on the prompt I like the way it lends you to the depth of, "eternity beyond" good write
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wow that's a lot of feeling in that. Nice!
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Most interesting for sure lol
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Very sensual and romantic with powerful diction such as "starvation", "warmth", "loosening", and "beyond" to enforce those feelings of longing.
However, I must disagree with the masses by being the first to say that I do not like the word "strangle" in this poem at all. It is definitely powerful, but it threw me off for a bit due to the connotations attached to it.
Overall, well written, and well liked. Good luck.
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i really love the fist line of this starngle my starvation, it says so much and it adds to the depth and detials in the rest of your lines, i like the way this poem flows, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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I like the phrase 'Strangle my starvation.' It forces the mind to turn a backflip into translating it as 'Sustain me.' You've just taught me a useful technique for improving my poetry. Thank you!
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Not bad...I like it.
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yes it fits...
I actually really like this write
Simon
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deeply engaging and immensely captivating. Well crafted in ten words. I see a shiny tin here... x Best wishes love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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Do you Donna???
Where...lol
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