Enraptured in the bliss
of sated sex…
Trembling I sighed.
In a list
A contest entry
- 500 points for 10 words by Unsigned.
950 points, ended June 15, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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As you probably heard with this poem before, so much with so little.
You really did a wonderful job, and I enjoyed reading it so much
Favorite lines
"Enraptured in the bliss
of sated sex…"
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I like that someone has entered a 3 line poem into this contest. I was upset to see that people have been ignoring the rules, so thanks for entering something short.
Its definitely hot too. And Ilike that youve ended it on a sigh.
Good luck and thanks for this
Emmyb -
Excellent alliteration and internal rhyme.
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oh yeah
thats what I'm talking about, lol. Good write that is a great feeling , aye Bill?!
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this is a very well penned piece! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
~NeeCee -
Sighs all around, then lol
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Simply lovely!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on...
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There is so much passion and sensuality in this poem, revealed by the words "bliss", "sex", and "sighed".
The thing that concerns me with this poem as far as the contest goes is that it seems to describe lust much more than it does love.
Overall, good job!
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i really love the creativeness you have used in this poem it is really deep and i love your first line the best enraptured in the bliss, its very deep, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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Mm...yeah! *happy memories* I enjoyed reading this.
Might put a comma between 'trembling' and 'sighed.' -
Sighssss. I like it, so satisfying...Good job
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I wonder what's up with the lust provoked by this writing... I'm sorry, but it doesn't make me feel much about love at all, yet it's still nice.
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yes I think I would sigh to..
Good luck
Simon
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