Born of Sin and Mother's Gin,
My demented life begins.
Seems that I no longer cry
as the years are passing by.
I've become the distant one;
Emotion free and feeling numb.
Take a pill in hopes it will
provide an artificial thrill.
Quickly grown and on my own,
running from the past I've known.
I don't care as I prepare
my daily life of solitaire.
Deprived of a family love;
Curse the very God above.
Another day to hide away;
Suicide this very day.
Now, I am about to die;
Overdose has been applied.
Fetal curled as death unfurled;
Gratified to leave this world!
Born of Sin and Mother's Gin,
My path to Hell must now begin!
Author notes
Contest Jessi-Desensytized a.k.a. BabyChronic0304 *OPTIONS* by Jessi-desensytized Option:3
"Buried Treasures"
In a list
A contest entry
- Fabulous Lyrical Line to Inspire..... by jcat.
2000 points, ended June 28, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotions by satan-.
950 points, ended July 14, 2008, 65 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the commentary on society that this poem makes (especially regarding drugs and such), well done. Thank you for entering this contest
just a note to ask you to check that you have followed the rules - I wish you the best of luck when it comes to judging!
Keep writing
Polly
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woahhh....POWERFUL! This could easily describe what so many people probably feel every day.... My personal favorite:
"Fetal curled as death unfurled;
Gratified to leave this world!"
It shows how life and death are so easily linked, and I thought that was really brilliant Thanks for entering!
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beautiful
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Congratulations on winning the GOLD! hey, where's the credit for my line???? You ran with the prompt, told a very sad tale, and your rhyme was impeccable all the way through! Suicide is not a subject I am comfortable talking about. Your verse captured the angst before the sin so well. NO wonder you are one of my favorites!
Linda
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You so blew my mind with this......especially after I judged and saw that it was you! I had NO IDEA!!! I loved this from beginning to end and could totally feel that one line throughout this piece!! Well done and thank you for entering!!
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Wow
i liked this poem alot. its very well written and the flow was just great. my favorite part is when you said "Deprived of a family love; Curse the very God above" that was worded so well. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck.
..<3..
Shelly -
WOW great write..good luck in the contest..xxx
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Heck!! That's a morbid write!! But just perfect for that prompt!! I felt the burden and the thought of not even death releasing it was brutal!
Excellent write my friend!
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SOUNDS LIKE HE WAS ALREADY IN HELL,
VERY SAD
INCREDIBLE TALENT
MY FRIEND
I LOVE YOUR STORY POEMS
ALWAYS A PERFECT RYHME
GOD BLESS...
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MY PATH TO HELL BEGAN AGES AGO.. AWESOME POEM GOOD LUCK
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Good write, but frightening...mary
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It doesn't matter what genre you write in, it's always fantastic! Best of luck to you!
Linda
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I like this one alot.I wish that I could write that well.
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