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Unholy Birthday





Sanguine tempestuous reprisal,
eradicates affable memories.
Screaming four words,
“Happy Birthday Cherished Death.”






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13 Words

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    June 24, 2008

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    This is a cool poem. I love the darkness of it. Death doesn't seem to be having a good day. LOL I enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • SuicidalLover
    June 14, 2008

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    I liked it very much...had to pull out the dictionary, but it was worth it. Very dark. Thank you.
    ~Kystal Angel


  • marlene47 silver member
    June 14, 2008

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    Liked the death's birthday take you have with this - its seizing and destroying, screaming to itself a birthday song.
    Marlene


  • Unsigned gold member
    June 14, 2008
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    Well written and very apt

    Good luck

    Simon


  • The Imperfection
    June 13, 2008
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    daaaamn. that's takes the cake


  • KayJay
    June 13, 2008

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    Hmmm isn't that 4 words? (LOL) Love the word choice and it says a lot for 13 words... Well done.
    Ken

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