We are mirrors, windows,
Images, meanings,
Colors blending--
White light.
A contest entry
- 500 points for 10 words by Unsigned.
950 points, ended June 15, 2008, 20 entries
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Comments
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Excellent.
I like the way you tippytoed around the prompt.
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different take to the prompt
well done I enjoyed the read allot, good write
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ooh this is PRETTY! sorry i couldnt come up with a better word... but i really liked the last two lines and the some list wasnt bad or anything! it was beautiful! well i liked it! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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This is a wonderful take on the prompt!
Best Wishes in the contest...
Write on!
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The symbolism of this poem is astounding. I love how deep and understandable this poem is, and yet it's also complex and cloudy.
One thing I didn't like is that it is kind of like a list of sorts. That annoyed me a little.
However, the ending is what truly won me over. The "Colors blending--/White light" was amazing. First off, the contrast between the words "blending" and "white", which is usually a symbol for purity, really tied it all together. Also, the fact that it mad sense logically as well as symbolically blew me away.
Great job and good luck!
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I wasn't too keen about the listy aspect, either; I wanted more verbs. I hope I can come up with them later on. I'm glad the overall effect was good, though. Thank you so much for taking the time to comment.
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Perfect capturing of some of our depth lol and good luck in the contest lol
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i like how you have used light for this prompt, i love how you tell about the light and also the mirrors, it is really deep, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing ~Amy
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Different and though provoking
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Different and interesting.
Well done.
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Heavy imagery there, placing the lovers as objects used just for the beauty of an "everything", which is also blessed by external factors. Good one.
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now this is really interesting...
Very well done here!!!
Simon
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