Together, alone,
caught in the shadows,
quietly cementing our
devotion.
Author notes
ten words...do not use:love, pair, couple, hug, kiss or any form of any of these words...
A contest entry
- 500 points for 10 words by Unsigned.
950 points, ended June 15, 2008, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Cemented devotion. I love that.
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Very nice. I like these ten words of truth which happens when young love blossoms.
I wish you luck! 
~Kystal Angel
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i LOVED your choice of words in this piece! truly elegant! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
~NeeCee -
Perfect lol and wishing you well in the contest lol
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This is a very sensual poem. I really liked the 3rd and fourth lines: "quietly cementing our devotion". That is true romance and passion.
I also enjoyed the sharp contrast in the first line between "together" and "alone". However, I'm not quite sure I understood it completely.
Overall, good job!
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i really love your take on this wonderful prompt i love how you have used concrete to make this feeling more solid, great thought, i love the flow this poem has, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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very nice; well done!
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I like this very much. It describes the image in a way new to me yet also follows the rules of the contest, which some poems so far haven't. Very enjoyable to read!
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I like....well done.
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Straight to the core and with some heavy paintings there, letting love be something that grows no matter the consequences. Nice.
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Beautifully done..
Simon
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