Blood on the floor;
funny it's heart shaped.
Like the heart I just
tore out.
It's his fault
he shouldn't have lied
or betrayed me.
Then he'd still be alive.
Author notes
30 words as asked. I think I got mystery romance and tragedy in there...well maybe not quite; oh well. I'll live I'm sure.
A contest entry
- 30 word short verse ~ big points ~4 more needed.... by Unsigned.
1400 points, ended June 25, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ow ow ow ....well done
Congrats on a great write
Simon
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Thanks! Glad you think so
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Smoothly done a very fine piece of work and excellent take on the prompt. Good luck
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Thank you!
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caught my attention
The last line was an unexpected twist
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Thanks. Hehe it was supposed to be that way but I wasn't sure it worked. Glad it did though!
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Best wishes in the contest.
Write on.
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hehe don't worry I will
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hahaaha this was amazing! i loved it! i like how it's not cliche. i wish you all the best of luck in the contest!
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Thanks. I always try not to be cliche. I'm glad it was liked!
Thank you!
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