adrenaline cultivates them
amorous desires left unsaid
bodies left craving
Author notes
i tried for you
A contest entry
- 500 points for 10 words by Unsigned.
950 points, ended June 15, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful Imagery
You have captured the picture quite well. This was wondeful and a pleasure to read. Take care, Sandy
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Very good write and really paints a vivid picture.
Best of Wishes in the Contest
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Nicely written and very relatable.
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Nicely penned
leaves one with that empty feeling of need gor satisfaction
good write
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You actually said so much with your word choice. My fav word was adrenaline. It spiked something in me.
I wish you luck!
~Kystal Angel
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aaww thank you for your kind comment!
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I like your flow...
Best wishes in the contest!
*PEACE*
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thank you! glad you liked my flow!
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Oops...I meant to applaud you...but I guess I have to write another comment to do so.
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It kinda leaves me wanting more. I guess with ten words, that's a little expected though, huh?
Even so, it's strong, and the nice use of diction in this poem stands out most.
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yeah i really struggled with ten words! but i'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Wow, this is spellbinding, really...loving it and wishing you good luck in the contest lol
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spellbinding??? stop you're gonna make me blush! thank you for your comment!
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A noteworthy write, really sticks, go for it lol
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i really like how you have used the adrenaline flowing to say so much with this wonderful poem, i love how you have also used bodies left craving, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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thank you!!!!
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Very lovely ten words..I liked the idea of the adrenaline..the use of the word amorous- best of luck in the contest
Ruby
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thank you! i like that word to! so much more interesting then using the word horny! lol
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I really like the lines about 'desires left unsaid' and 'bodies left craving.'
It makes me wonder what 'them' refers to. Does 'them' stand for 'amorous desires' or for something unnamed in any other way? If it is only a pronoun referring to amaorous desire, is it needed in such a short poem?
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one:thank you so much for your comment! i like to read what people get from my poems and two:i really like the little phrase in your pic!!
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Nice words; good luck!
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thank you!!!
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You tried and you didn't get anything? So sad, because the feelings poured here are a little lusty and full of desire, something a lover desires (At least in my case).
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thank you! and i love your picture! and the hat!!
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Mmmmm left craving
Good job
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thank you so much!
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Shame...so they walked away..
Nice well done Poet
Simon
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this is good sweetie,
i like this alot, you did well,
i would have stuggled
all my love,
kitty,, love you
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