The heat invades my skin
Seeps deep into my bones
I revel in the feelings
And in the sun that warms.
But then it begins
It's journey cross the sky
Soon it's beating down
Temperatures rise high
What once brought pleasure
Is now bringing pain,
A heat that strangles,
Then suffocates the brain.
Now, too hard to breathe,
Impossible to move,
I languish in this place,
I pray for something cool,
A dark cloud to drift in
To save me from my doom,
Rain to break the grip of
A hot summer afternoon.
A contest entry
- How's the Weather? by Judith Chandler.
625 points, ended June 29, 2008, 9 entries
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"What once brought pleasure in now bringing pain." I agree with you. I remember being such a sunworshipper up until my late 30s. Now I am afraid to get too much sun though actually I have gone beyond fear to a stage of apathy.
It does feel like the sun is suffocating the brain and all you want to is languish. I like the "dark cloud to drift in"
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This is among some of the finest pieces I've read in allpoetry. And I enjoyed the way you brought each verse together.
robyn
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A nicely balanced and effective piece of rhyme and rhythm. Easy on the ear, well done.
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Do you want some of the rain we have been having? Minus the heat, you can have it if you want
I'm about tired of all the storms we've been having. I love the flow and imagery of the lines. Good luck in the contest.
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I live in Florida, the heat here is a nice backdrop for reading this poem.
I love all the emotion put into this. The flow and imagery is great. 
~Cassie
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Great. The rhyme and flow are perfect and it makes me want a cool shower. Nice job. They always are
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