Brink
Edge
Peer
over
crumble of rocks
tick
tick
clinking on the side of the mountain,
blades
shoulder blades
held
pulled
wordless
motionless
apart.
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie... Qoute Prompt by Angelflower.
609 points, ended June 21, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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This was really good.. I like this.. that flow was broken but it seems to fit this poem.. It's a really unique take....Thank you very much for sharing.. I enjoyed reading this.. Best of luck.
Angel
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wow.....I could feel myself actually standing there...it is difficult to portray emotions in the form presented, but you managed handsomely..
Simon
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