Confusion reigns ......
amidst the tug-of-war
between sorrow and salvation
.... yet despite which ever
should rescind its grip first
I'd rather just go
and sit in the shade.
Author notes
20-30 WORDS
PROMPT: "I'm on the edge of either Hell or Heaven and neither God nor the Devil will let me go." by Noni Wang
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A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie... Qoute Prompt by Angelflower.
609 points, ended June 21, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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This is such a powerful write. I really like the struggle between sadness and happiness in this.
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you did a wonderful job with the prompt.. I like the image that you created.. It's short but has power.. well done.. Thank you very much for sharing.. Best of luck..
Angel
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I love this! So much said in few words and the last line could melt hearts...I just sigh when coming to that line and could read it again and again...I am so amazed by your talent Cuz
Lynda
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sits down next to you in the shade...
I agree totally
Simon
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I would rather just go sit in the shade...then contemplate life as hell or heaven when caught in the middle! Interesting. ~Sie
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