Summer time brings light
greeting the morning early
birds begin to sing
as the sun extends
its warmth heating mother earth
a quench of rain falls
wet drops of nature
glisten with beauty again
restoring dried hope
By Sherry Finley
A contest entry
- 3 haiku contest by Swan song.
550 points, ended June 14, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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These are all very nice but I love the last one the most. Such a nice way to describe that and make it clear for all to see . . . and hear too through your words. Restoring dried hope - that's a great thought. Another good job, Sherry.
Daddy Paul
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Lovely!
"Restoring dried hope"- that line made the whole poem. You have become quite clever in your use of the language. I am so impressed.
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Very nice haiku poems
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Hello there and thank you so much.This is kind of a hard form to write so limited and strict but I gave it a shoot.Appreciate you reading me.
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Very good work Sis. I always enjoy your pieces, they are sincere and concise. Good job
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Thank you it was sort of hard to do not the easiest form to write for me because its so strict and limited in its structure. Hope you had a good weekend love ya ♥
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I think the third haiku here is your strongest
the other two are not bad, but the third one sticks out.
It is also concise. Very well done! and thanks for entering
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I thought you and others might find this link on the haiku with interesting variations. You see, by root form, the haiku doesn't necessarily restrict itself to 5-7-5
Know why? Because Japanese write in glyphics (oriental characters which can only be described as symbols of a word or words in each one). That would make the count different. ( usually 9-17 with no restriction on which line should have more or less
). The pattern of 5-7-5 was a way of distributing the count with a kind of 'shape'involved.http://wiki.answers.com/Q/What_are_Haiku_examples
I found that a good 'tada' is best in the last line, its final thought in as few words as possible. Yes. It's testy, but you're good at these.
The contest holder is doing a justice to at least give a choice so as not to make it too liberal. What I don't know about is the 3rd option. Is it meant to give YOU the one that fits the bill of criteria or the one that is neither of the two and your own?
Either way, it's fascinating. I love the ku. It's so special! I wish you and others the best during this contest.
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lovely!
when nature is showing her beauty so do you in your poetry, I love this piece , thank you for sharing this and good luck in this contest..Linda
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Why, Sherry. These are GOOD! They are more contemporary and acceptable than the more
traditional. Each line tells something that
the ending can 'hold'.
In the last line of the last one, I know what you
were trying to say. I think you can say it
with an even better descriptive; perhaps instead
of 'dried', that is.
Otherwise ... very good!
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Thank you I like it I do but question they wanted it in 5-7-5 or 4-6-4 I don't know if each set of three had to be the same through out of it could vary in some places.
If I used that would it still fall into the guidelines since I used 5-7-5 though each line until the end?
I do like the suggestion but my question will it still be within the rules of what they are asking let me know.
Again thank you Cookie ♥
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well done
you have penned out three wonderful haiku's here. Good luck with the contest.
Yvonne
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Thank you Yvonne, hope things are going good for you and your enjoying the summer its been pretty hot here in Ky.
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A beautiful description of summer! A delight to read! I love the last stanza... refreshing!
Frogz~
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Thank you so much these are hard to write because of the limit to the word count and then it has to be on nature. I have done several forms and I think these are not the easiest for me like some of the others. Having you read this means a lot Frog thanks from my heart. ♥♥
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