I know its an everlasting flame
As I watch you walk away
Stuck inside this simple house
I know you have no shame
Every day, every night
I'm at my window watching you
Your daily habits, nightly routines
All I ever do is watch
Years go by, I see you change
Never once looking my way
Stuck inside this simple house
I know you have no shame
It's been awhile
Since you left
Since that fatefull day
At that time I had decided; I wouldn't let you walk away
As I came out, I saw you there
I saw you look my way
But you just walked past me: and I let you
I let you walk away
A contest entry
- Breaking Up....Getting Hurt... by Luckintheshadows.
450 points, ended June 13, 2008, 11 entries
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Comments
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Letting someone go can be one of the hardest things you have to do in life.... This is a great poem that expresses the emotions well. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work
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Thank you for entering my contest. It take great determination and strength of character to watch someone you still love walk away. If this came from your real life; i commend you. You have captured the emotions one would feel in this situation very well. I like that the poem has a structure. one line that confused me a bit was the " Stuck inside this simple house I know you have no shame"... ha i dont really understand but either way the poem was amazing. Nice write and good luck!
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no that complex but still over powering... i can see it all cleary how this plays out good job
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ouch! this hurt my heart in a big way!!! Such simple words, but such impact! Like a rock hitting a china vase...absolutely shattering.
Thank you for sharing this,
Luck.
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