The endless drives && oh how hard I tried to make you into something that you'll never be. A beautiful soul seen through soulless eyes, why are you haunting me? Walk away from everything you've ever loved && pray to god they don't follow you. Ample regret, is what you whisper. Coarse lips && unshaven face. You never really learned to love, because you've never learned to lose. The truth permeates the room like stale cigarette smoke && cheap vodka. I took the pen && drew you a map of the shortest way home, I dotted the lines && shaded the trees just for posterity.
I was your get out of jail free card.
A look you were trying on for size.
The ending to the story you never thought to write.
So how about we meet in December && compare our scars behind the dumpster of a sleazy dive. Push me up against the cold brick wall && give me a kiss that never meant a thing. Walk away from me again, baby, just give me a little less hope to hang myself with.
Author notes
oh my lover look what you've done, you've gone && took my love away
A contest entry
- Personaly experiences by Ntagatf.
500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 19 entries
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Smart!
" I took the pen && drew you a map of the shortest way home, I dotted the lines && shaded the trees just for posterity."
How did you do that? How did you sum up the whole poem in these little words? Right in the middle? Your words sum up, recap and illuminate in a powerful sense of the then, now and future. What an excellent piece you have created here. This is profound and deep and sorrowful and beyond description but yet still portrayed. I love this! I was drawn in and thrown about and left with the feeling that I had just been enlightened and now what am I gonna do about it?????
Such a good write!
I like your unique style as well!
Bravo!
Justified Inc.
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wow
I enjoyed reading this, held my interest from the beginning till the end, Great work. Great way of explaining how he made you feel with out too much lovey dovey stuff... lol anyway thank you for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck, keep up the good work!
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