The wasted years flash,
this time,
without tears.
Your sorry's
rain blurred.
This
blinkless moment,
your last reprieve.
Unable to continue
dancing upon this thread,
used once already
to mend.
Author notes
Prompt:
To write a poem about patience,
and not as a virtue, please.
REQUIREMENTS:
30 words exactly
free verse only
left align
plain background/no images
label appropriately
edit all work
NO reservations
Spell check told me to put a hyphen in blinkless. But it didn't seem right.
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF - Free Verse Word Prompt by Dalaney.
850 points, ended July 4, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I do not know what is better you poem or this background that i am sure you created
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Nice Job Here
A wonderful piece penned for the given prompt!
You really captured the meaning here I think crystal clearly.
I wish you all the best within the contest, Peace~
-Timothy aka poeticweaver~
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Damn... This is such a pained and powerful piece of expression. Very well penned. The depth you exude in so few words - excellent! Great write my dear!!!
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This is oh so sad it makes me want to reach out and hug you but it is a great write goodluck in the contest love you loads
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So sad
Words that seem to finalize and sad yet loving romance that no longers hangs on by that thread. That poet strikes a cord in the readers heart. Threadbare love lost
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Outstanding!
Truly an amazing message and fantastic style of poetry! Such amazing imagery and emotion in thie piece. Gripping to your reader. "dancing upon this tread, used once already to mend" Superb metaphor! Brilliant work! Don 
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