A grunting sky
sweats from clouded temples;
emergency broadcasts
are flat-line emissions.
Vigorously writhing, responding
to the tearing of sacred mouth.
The water broke,
a bloody show.
Erosion of the river's thighs
deliver death in labor.
Overhead lights flash rampant,
wheeled down through Kansas Hall,
a lurch of stomach spits oxygen,
outward pumping lungs.
Reaching the arms out
to scrape the plaster.
Knocking down gifted foliage
over wooded table,
the professionals move in
to relieve the pain.
Spinal injections come in the form
of Reserve Troop relief.
Later the cleaners
will mop up the floor.
A contest entry
- Natural disasters! by mwilson50.
900 points, ended June 19, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellent
'tis a fine write,indeed, with great imagery in relation to the pic. You expressed you thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
Great stuff
No stranger to a storm myself I really appreciated the drama. Well done. -
That was awesome.
Amazing imagery...I loved it, especially since I love storms. -
oh my!
I think you've expertly delivered the birth of a storm
so very vivid with such auditory imagery!!
well done!
and best of luck in the contest!!
~s.p.
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Whoa!
This is a helluva write. You should have sent it to Poetry. I suspect you'd be getting an acceptance from them, or at least an encouraging note.
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Intruiging
Like giving birth to a major disaster. Interesting mixing of images here. Thanks for your entry! -
The birth of a storm indeed coming on like waves of unstoppable labor, bringing pain along with it, written as if you are no stranger to the delivery, a messy cleanup! very graphic and believable!
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clever...cleverly done!
(your forgot to scream a couple times)
we all winced we saw on tv that whale give a 110 pound
baby..ouch!
i loved your poem!
ears/Seattle
you know i'm having a guest writer a master dark writer
in our group, he would tell you wickedly expand up the
emotion in this poem to make it speak vivid and outloud.
make sure you get a peek at him, truly interesting writer
we can learn some tips from.
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