Embracing The Night
The insistent drone of a clock
chanting its mystical rhythm,
with anticipation hot beneath my breast
abandoned by thought as instincts surged
instant relief accompanied the sole chime,
signaling Midnights arrival
Like a seed bursting to life
eagerness and blood lust consumed me,
eating away at my will, my humanity,
a raging inferno of molten magic
ensnaring me within its waiting grasp,
surrendering to such, the change
My world, void of life and color,
persistent voices howling upon the wind
as hands of bark clawed at my hind quarters
unhampered I was, of the surrounding chaos,
hypnotized by mother moon’s innocent compulsion
rendering my throat to her, I cried
singing with the voices of my kin,
the song of the wolves
Author notes
I was inspired to write this poem by a book I was reading. It was Sci Fi and Fantical. About a werewolve going through the change. I tried to take what numerous people associate as something bloody and animalistic and describe it in my own words as something that is other wordly and that retains a subtle aesthetic beauty as well, the change or bimorphism.
Also I wanted to wish someone a happy birthday. "Happy Birthday, Cassondra!"
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It's intense. I've never read on the theme and like the original way you've approached it.. but the flow's kind of choppy- not that I have any hope with flow lol. And some of the lines seem over the top, quite a few in the second stanza. The content is good, but it could be more concise, there are words that are aleady implied.
Good substances- just polishing down and spacing out.
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Great imagery, and I loved the line
"with anticipation hot beneath my breast"
However, I didn't think it flowed very well
The subject was very original, though, which I enjoyed, and the way you wrote it. Not only are werewolves rarely written about, the pieces are even less likely to portray beauty and calling, rather than horror or pain.
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wow this is amazing [:
yuu captured an image of an untame animal in more of a beautiful light, very well crafted!
everytime i try and write something a little more beautiful it all comes out as some sort of warped misfigurment or death related =/
"singing with the voices of my kin" i think the only thing i would change within the poem would be the word kin, i think it's too weaker a word for such a strong peice
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Nice use of imagery here. Great opening line. Can't say I've read too many poems about werewolves in the past, (not my thing) but if they were all like this I might read more.
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Like a seed bursting to life
eagerness and blood lust consumed me,
eating away at my will, my humanity,
a raging inferno of molten magic
ensnaring me within its waiting grasp,
surrendering to such, the change <<< i think that is so well written as its not riciculously said, youve made this subject so beleivable with your words and not many people can do that, i wouldnt change a thing, good poem ! -
I love this. You did a really good job of building up intensity right at the moment of midnight. Also, I like how after "instincts surged", the rest seems to be involuntary or automatic.
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Excellent us of imagery and particularly like the personification in your opening line to describe the 'drone' of the clock.Similarly the simile 'like a seed bursting into life' you use to describe such an overwhelming emotion nicely encapsulates something you can't control yet gives it a feeling of being completely natural at the same time - is that an oxymoron then!!! Some effective touches of alliteration too, particularly in the final verse. I must admit this isn't the type of genre I normally would read but having said that, this is well crafted and most certainly held my interest, so well done you ! Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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This was well done. I truely enjoyed it. It was an almost romantic take on Lycantropes. Thank you for sharing this and keep writting they are really very well done
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I really liked that poem! Great descriptions. I enjoyed your take on this fantasy. Great write.
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a good poem, the flow of magical night here, wolves wandering through nocturnal language, seeking their peace of mind in new realms.
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Why, I really like this. It's neat how you took such a topic many write amateurish poems about, and make it worthwhile. This is really creative and the imagery very vivid. I think the first and last stanzas are the best in this poem. Keep writing
~Diana
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