I.
the sky,
you said,
was an old
man in love.
II.
this was
more disturbing
than the blood
on my tires.
Author notes
I would have to say that this is the most 'religious' poem I've written in a while. Seriously, some people's ideas about God are kinda weird.
In a list
A contest entry
- Paint God in my August sky by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended June 13, 2008, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wowww.
i don't even know what to say.
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I.
the sky,
you said,
was an old
man in love.
II.
this was
more disturbing
than the blood
on my tires.wow this is such a wonderful poem on the promt congratulations on you shiny x
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how immensely gripping and sincerely thought provoking... x
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dude YES.
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thanks
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I LOVED IT... i think that you used the right amount of PUNCH to get it in there... sweet and simple yet hard and hairy... lol... i enjoyed...
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thanks
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Wow, how poetic & how ironic! I love this SO very much. You deliver quite the punch line and not a word/image goes to waste.
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thanks. I'm not really all that good at the '20 words' type contests, but I try.
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Are you kidding about the word limit?? I wish I'd written this
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