I can’t get my mind off you
Thought of your sweet smile
The smell of your hair
The way you make me smile
Just hearing your name makes my heart jump
I can truly be my self with you
Which I can’t do even by me self
I can trust you with my thoughts and feelings
I can trust you with my hopes and dreams
I can help you when you are feeling down
You brighten my day just by saying hello
All I think about is you
I think about how lucky I am
To be able to hold you
Cherish you like a beautiful cherry blossom
And to be able to love you
With all my heart
A contest entry
- Really?no way! [Anyone anywhere] by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
375 points, ended June 28, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do u think..be honest cause i cant write
Comments
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I love the feel this poem radiates by reading it. Extremely good job!
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I can see this poem is about someone very special, It has alot of love in it. I love this poem you have an AMAZING talent ty for giving me the honor of letting me read this
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awww...this is adorable. i dont even know what to say...its so heartfelt and just....cute. i love ittt!
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Enjoyable
I feel the same way about her...I honestly do.
"All I think about is you
I think about how lucky I am
To be able to hold you"
Yep...and it's been months...months since I held her and it destroys me everyday. We should be together...always...she knows it and so do I...but we can't because I'm not the right skin colour for her daddy. Bleh...thats another story.
As for the poem I enjoy it...the description of how she makes you feel pours out of the words. I can relate to this so easily, which is most important. Structure is fine and it's good that this poem isn't too long. Keep on writing! 8/10! -
Wow..
This poem is very cute. Its very lovely. Its very well written. My favorite part is when you said "I think about how lucky I am To be able to hold you" that was the cutest part and very well worded. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck
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*tears*
Oh hun...you have no idea...Im crying right now...
Oh sweetheart...
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thanx
thank you... you have no idea how much it means to me that you like it...
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