Ensure your parachute
doesn't have holes
jump
before you ^^^^
It's a long
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Author notes
Lyric (or picture) prompt + 13 words only
When you believe in things that you don't understand,
then you suffer-
by Stevie Wonder- Superstition
Lyric prompt:
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2409491
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 13 Words - [One Day Only] by Desire.
1300 points, ended June 13, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: No holes
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ even with 13Words...after inhaling I kept seeing word: Exactly
I was reminded about the man who jumped from an airplane without a parachute but with his camera...Not too pleasant results but expected~
For some reason...when I read Your piece...I kept hearing phrase: Mother of two...Mother of two~ just kept tapping on my noggin-
reference to babysitter and faintly...faintly was hearing: can't trust anyone these days or can't trust anyone nowadays...unsure of clarity re: which faint phrase exactly~
Hearing word: puppy....seeing one like trying to climb on a pant leg
and nudged to mention word: Precious~
Nowwwwwwwwwww for some reason when I read Your piece again~ I was getting word: Emphasis- and then a pause and then word: You..........
as if You are Important and getting this feeling of needing to recognize that- family-friends etc
Nudged to mention that strongly~
Hopefully that makes sense
Powerful images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
It's a long fall
Unique Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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As good as this advice is, I just had to chuckle. Good advice, cute piece. Good luck in the contest.
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