Your beautiful blue eyes
glisten in the sun's glorious rays.
Each fragile ray that caresses your flesh
makes me more and more jealous.
Each ounce of my body
wants to be that ray
caressing your flesh.
As the water splashes up
each drop wraps around your legs.
Surrounding the limbs
I want more than anything
to be between.
So I can please you
and forever be your sensual lover.
In a list
A contest entry
- Erotica Extravaganza Part 1 Of 5 by Cerulean Sunrise.
600 points, ended July 2, 2008, 27 entries
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Comments
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Nicely done! I love the imagery and the jealousy the nature so simple. Great write and good luck!
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This was the essence of suffering caused by lustful cravings... Where ever there is what seems lovable and gratifying, there is that potential for suffering to flourish!!!
Ithica
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First stanza - last three lines - that was a nice mixture of imagery and phrasing. I really felt the rest was too obvious and the flow from sensual to beauty was not close enough.
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This is very sweetly written.
Thank you so much for entering. -
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sweet and sensual... -
...Aside from the fact that the repetition of, "caressing your flesh" was a little awkward, I LOVED that line about "Each fragile... more jealous". Very well-said! Best of luck to you!
Laura x
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Beautiful, I love the first stanza and the jealousy of the ray, this is a wonderful sensuous piece.
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good
I had to do some work here.This made me think.But you did a nice job in the words given.It is good write.Guess it could have been more elabortae with your beloved being covered in more aspects.Please visit some of poetry as well. -
Very sensual and erotic... Wonderful images and wonderfully felt...
Ken
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G R E A T !
yum, that was a very hot piece, very sensual, i really enjoyed reading this poem...amazing write.
good luck in the contest you entered
NL
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