Patience was written
In her hair
From root to tip.
So might one
Paint in pointillism,
Dot by tiny dot--
Colors meaningless for months
Until the image
Appears.
In her hair,
Tiny white dots
Form a Turin-shroud image of
Murder.
Author notes
Prompt: Patience--not a virtue.
Death by potassium cyanide poisoning
A contest entry
- PIF - Free Verse Word Prompt by Dalaney.
850 points, ended July 4, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The prompt for which this was entered makes me giggle just a little, because growing up I always heard the opposite.
Short but sweet, and it definantly creates a strong image in one's mind. 
Thank you for sharing in the group reading list my dearie. 
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strange but i like it. makes me think of sacrid symbols written by only using dots. great write keep up the good work
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Excellent write. Great title. Love the evolving metaphor of pointillism, "dot by tiny dot--meaningless for months until the image appears" with the gradual incorporation of administered toxins into the body, even "from root to tip" of hair. Excellent response to the prompt!
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Oh, wow.... fantastic! I needed the explaination but only due to less knowledge... I've never known a poem like this and its brilliant! Well done!!
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It's a symptom that I have watched way too many episodes of Quincy, Crossing Jordan, Bones, and CSI: Miami. (g) Glad you enjoyed it!
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