Haven't I walked this path before
my heart long chained behind
through the lies and open wounds
fighting to regain my mind.
Insanity's breath reduces me,
it blows right through my tears.
The grip I am losing from beyond my sight
yields uncontrollable fears.
Without your presence in my world
I can no longer cope.
Reality's realm blurred by day
dangling intangible dreams of hope.
Just within my grasp
but then pulled just beyond.
My frozen life's mirror cracked
so heart and soul can't bond.
I've seen long nights without your touch.
I've seen the days so cold
through frosty hell I've come so far
trying to buy back what I have sold.
Too high a price my heart retains
for precious mortal cost
in order to shed momentary pains
glimpse of eternity, all is lost.
Author notes
mirror image...image mirror
A contest entry
- wake me up and let me know you're alive by Weetzie bat.
850 points, ended July 25, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Wanna Feel Your Pain by slippingofftheedge.
300 points, ended August 15, 2008, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty please...
Comments
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i like the imagery but i would have like some more real life emotion. why did you feel this way? what made you so hopelessly in love in this lost person?
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I liked the flow - it reads really well - well written, as often in writing, i thought it got into its stride more near the end.
A great piece though.
xx
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thanx so much for your support James..much appreciated..
hugs..
r
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I do enjoy your poem. I love the imagery that's been placed here and even though I'm not very fond of rhyme this doesn't aggrivate me all that much.
I really appreciate your poem, your story.
thank you so much for entering -
I really like this. It's wonderfully written. I don't often come across a rhyming poem that flows well, but this one does so beautifully, so well done I really enjoyed this. I could feel the emotions here and see the imagery that you painted so vividly. Brilliant write.
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thank you so much for your kind comment..it is always an honor when other writers comment...
blessings..
namaste..
r
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Excellent
A very powerful creation. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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thank you so much for your kind comment..
blessings..
namaste..
r
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It's perfect...
...for my contest. I really liked this piece. It was very emotional and you really put it out there. It must have taken a lot to go through that kind of pain, and still be willing to give up all your sanity just for love. This poem was just absolutely fantastic. It was well written -good luck! -
What a stunning piece!!
Your words dance before
my eyes...
A sad and cleverly written
piece.
~Pastel
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my dearest friend..
thank you so much for your kind comment..your support means so much to me....you are such a blessing to me..
namaste my friend..
r
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a good piece of poetry, i think that insanity captures us all at one time or another, and sometimes it never lets us free from its grasp. some good dark and spiralling movement with imagery here, reflections of love and life, shattered, a chasm between the heart and the spirit. ah eternity, it is but an illusion anyway, very much like the mirror. forever can last a second in the mind as time is its own master.
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thank you so much for your kind comment..support from other writers mean so much to me..blessings..namaste..
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