Obtrusively conspicuous,
the trepidation and superiority
established merely through presence
as vulnerability controls.
Author notes
Photo kudos to: Photobucket
Inspiration kudos to: Host.
Option B of course. 13 words.
Enjoy... I jumped out of the box...just hope its not a litterbox?
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 13 Words - [One Day Only] by Desire.
1300 points, ended June 13, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please give me some honest feedback~ Critique's welcomed
Comments
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Reminds me of a cat...but that's the point. Lovely.
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Mystical Feline
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I did several times~ even with 13Words...after inhaling I kept getting phrase: Wow~
Now in addition to this Wow~ I am being shown a bowl and word: copper also a stick type of instrument to tap against this bowl...
For some reason I am seeing a toad- first I thought a frog but being given the word: toad
However- afterwards seeing this toad on a plate served as a delectable dish~
Hearing phrase: Moral of the story is... (as if You fill in the blanks based on an experience whether in Life or in Slumber) Hearing word: Orient
I'm getting this step outside Your realm type of reference~ being shown a mirror but a crack at right side of glass...hearing word: shard...lower area-
Hopefully that makes sense
Powerful images You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
...as vulnerability controls.
Unique Voice spoken~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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there should've been a syllable quota
that's a mouthful.
it takes away from the meaning in my opinion -
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Sorry you didn't like it.
But I guess everyone hits a dud every now and then...
In simple terms it means the way a cat stares [Obtrusively conspicuous]at you can make some afraid [trepidation...Actually had one friend who would travel 10 miles out of the way cause she wouldn't cross the path of a black cat]; whereas others look at it regal or like royality [superiority] and both are done simply by the cat's presence... finally it's your own vulnerability [a method of what you may be weak to] to how you feel that makes you decide if your going to be fearful, or just go
'awe'.
Again, I do appreciate the comment.
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