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The rose in me.

Missing image

You define love

so harshly,

taking the purtiy from me

leaving me wilting

in salted waters.

 

Those thorns

are rooted deeply

clinging to me

and I bleed in that

stingy ocean of love,

wanting the abrasive

sands of yesterday to

errode the urge of staying.

 

The rose in me

still creeps out to

bloosom...

 

But it can't find the sun. 

 

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  • IanG silver member
    June 18

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    Excellent

    "wanting the abrasive sands of yesterday to erode the urge of staying." This is a profound statement and describes the plight of those in a loveless relationship who think their only chance of love is with the abuser. You have described real life situations here very well.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    June 16

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    Stunning!!!

    Wow, awesome work, girrrrl!! I absolutely love, love, love this poem!! Your muse is so gifted, it's unbelievable!! Congratulations on the bronze trophy!! Peace & Love, Cyn


  • Sagerider
    June 13
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    How beautiful yet sad

    It certainly deserved to be a winner. You never cease to amaze me. A quickie yet.


  • Carolina Moon silver member
    June 12

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    Wow, very beautifully written. I felt like I was reading my own thoughts relayed in your words. Well done indeed and I appreciate your wonderful entry.


  • leopardleaf
    June 12

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    wow

    I love the first three lines. This is very nicely written It's so dark... but with the love it makes it very sweet in a kind of dark/sweet/sad way... if that makes any sense.. sorry not too good with explaining... But it made me feel really interested in the history of what had happened to the person, what exactly made this sense to the writing. Ahh I cant explain it but all in all very good poem Write on dear poet!


  • Celtic Legend
    June 12

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    this is one of the most beautiful and meaningful poems you have done! this is absolutely wonderful! great pic too

  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 12
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    Undisputedly a strong feeling poem. Dark and painful done well.

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