I've never seen a beauty queen
believably benign
The slender boughs are sheen and mean
and fools will drink the wine
She offers me a taste unknown
to anything I'll find
unless I leave myself behind
unless I'm left behind.
The grays and browns of cobblestone
are cold and rough and raw as bone
but evening light's
a different sight
and stones can lead me home.
Author notes
"never get so attached to a poem
you forget truth that lacks lyricism"
"don't go chasin' waterfalls"
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Intriguing write ...
but it's definitely not one of your best. However, it has its own peculiar charm.
Not a bad job, all in all. Keep writing.
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great
I liked it.
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fantabulous
unless I leave myself behind
unless I'm left behind.
I see you wrote this a long time ago, what do you think about it now?
I love the cobblestone image, and how it's connected to both coldness and home.
Great poem as always.
(and I miss you)
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Nice
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A beautiful experience
A way with words
unlike the herds
Always a delight
May be the best
Of all the rest
You just might
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I loved:
"unless I leave myself behind
unless I'm left behind"
Fantastic poem.. impressed with your work as always..
db x
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AWESOME!
i loved this, it says so much in a very compact articulate poem... also? stones lead one home better than bread crumbs, as the wildlife tends to not eat stones, so great choice! lol, but in all seriousness, i cannot wait to read more of your work!
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An interesting title it took me moment to wrap my tongue around the last word. Another fine write unique and pleasing. Happy trails
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"Every journey starts with a single step."
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YEAH!!! Great!!!!
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