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So Completely

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Women are like snowflakes
each having their own delightful form
every one, unique in their structure and care
Each... a one of a kind treasure, wishing to be seen

Reclining
I find them amazing
some a bundle of sensuality
Others... soft and so very serene

In all love
I offer my own guidance
seeking to discover their passion
Wishing to find the source, of their inner fire

With you
there is no ending
just a touch, will lite you up
and you burn and burn, under my hands

I have learned
you love to be helpless
lovingly restrained, delicately covered
Hovering above you, I tease you almost to tears

Then coming closer
touching, feeling you tremble
lightly causing a flower to bloom upon you
Giving and holding back, to let you move beneath me

Closer now
seeing your need
caressing you as you wish
touching now, in the most intimate way

Enclose me love
let me move within you
gentle... then soon more pressing
arms above, holding you away helplessly

Let me devour you
bring you to your frenzy
and scream to the heavens for relief
Arch with me, in consuming unending passion now

I release you
to hold me completely
In ancient movements we glide
forgetting all... but the fire around us

The burning
that can not be denied
you pulsing, uncontrolled around me
Your scent fills the air, and I am lost in your beauty

For a moment
we touch the heavens together
and your look of adornment, is all I can see
I love you, that you gave yourself to me... so completely



Lee

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I never write filthy
I write of passion, as in beauty
I have touched few, I have not loved deeply
If I have touched you... you alone will feel the words completely

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  • TyrannyForestFairy
    July 27, 2008

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    Wow! This was intense sensuality and I really liked it. High descriptions through terminology and concepts. Great work!!

    ~Emily~ xx


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 27, 2008
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      Hank you Emily


      Good explanation
      Thank you for you careful reading

      Your kind
      Rick


  • Poetrybird86
    July 26, 2008

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    OMG!!! This poem is full of passion and desire, it is wonderful. I love how in the beginning you talk about the different type of women there are and how precious they are to you. Then as the poem goes on it gets hot and steamy. I believe I was actually holding my breath as I read this.

    This is a good read and well written. I wrote a poem similar to this one but not nearly as good.

    Keepp up the good work


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 27, 2008
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      Hi Poetrybird


      Pleased you liked my words
      Thank you so much for reading me
      You may find others you may like as well

      See my Focus Poems

      Rick


  • Kazytc
    July 25, 2008

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    Pure ecstacy!

    Wow this is just pure ecstacy! You sure know about love, passion, deep feeling, tenderness and soulful union amd you also have an understanding of the more unusual aspects of love and love making too, as evident from the undertones which are lovely and ark and mysterious, seductive and alluring and begging for exploration. Your poems are richly deep and graphic, beautiful in sentiment so tender and yet full of excitement and passion, vibrance and adventure. Poetic masterpiece is too much of an understatement to descibe and aptly lable your excellent poetic talent and artistry. Brilliant stiff very bewitching and alluring. Wow sensational! Bravo, Love it, very very well done! Delightful read.
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx
    Ps: Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
    Glad you liked it.
    Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
    Kaz.XX


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 27, 2008
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      Hi Kaz


      I read your comment to me again
      and thought I should say more than I did
      for the wealth of praise embelished upon my thoughts

      I need to say
      how much I appreate your care for my attempt
      to convay the the feelings, shared by lovers

      I think you used most of my favorite words

      For this I thank you

      With humility
      Rick


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 25, 2008

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      Thank you Kaz


      Pure ecstacy
      were my thoughts in this deed

      I always write from life
      and an amazing partner is a precious sensual gift

      A high tide raises all ships I guess
      With some, there is no end to passion

      Rick

  • neverdie
    June 19, 2008
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    the boobs are only fake to a jealous mind


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 19, 2008
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      Hi flyinghigh


      I see you read the comments
      Kind of irrilivent is it not

      Thanks for reading me

      Rick


  • snowbird600
    June 18, 2008

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    Beautiful words of passioon Rick. Thank you for telling me about your write.
    Sorry I'm not on much anymore. Summer is my time outside and enjoying the great lakes.
    You did a nice job with this write. The picture looks very familiar my friend. :-)
    This is a keeper. Hope it goes in your next book!
    Love ya
    Steffany


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 18, 2008
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      Hi Steffany


      What a great comment
      Yes, I am setting this aside for Book II WOLFW
      I darkened the picture a lot, to make it more suddel
      Enjoy the outside, I love Michigan summers

      Love you my friend
      Rick


  • hks
    June 16, 2008
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    those boobs are totally fake


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Violent


      Remaine calm

      They may or may not be real
      I know women that are homely, unless they are photographed correctly

      This picture was done in the most ideal conditions, "Camera Magic"
      The value is all within... anyway

      Did you read the words... lol

      Rick


      • hks
        June 16, 2008
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        words?

        haha justt kidding ill start reading now.. damn i thought a girl wrote this was looking for a fight i am bored.

        =D

        totally true

        men = work donkeys
        women = so hot gentle and perfect

        mmmm

        k?


        • Endeavor gold member
          June 16, 2008
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          Looking for a fight... lol


          I wondered why you are called Violent
          If this were fourty years ago, you could be me

          I wish you well in every endeavor
          Rick


  • trista gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    Hi Rick,

    Wow...!!! This is one you can be very proud of...it is (almost) perfect in every way. Change "there structure" to "their" in stanza 1 and I think you'll have it just right.

    Honestly, this is one of my favorites from you, maybe my very favorite thus far...and I already have read many of your poems I didn't think you could ever top...and yet you do, time after time. I LOVE how classy you write about lovemaking, never turning it into the cheap and easily discarded memory it too often is for people. I think this shows just how spiritual in nature that true connection between people is...or should be.

    Geez...and to think, even as your AP wife, I never had the pleasure of experiencing any of this first hand last summer when I visited. They say some things are better left to the imagination...I think that's where I'll keep that thought. LMAO

    Keep this up, I think you will have an awesome second book before you know it.

    Love and s
    ~J.


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      My Dear AP Wife


      Some day when you are eighty
      you may wish you had taken a turn or two in the summer
      That just proves, I don`t lay every woman I come in contact with... CooL

      As for the words, I am beyound honered that they may be a new favorite
      Because you edited my book, you know most everything I have concieved
      I take this as an awesome comment

      By the way, did you like the set-up, before the passion?... and yes,
      even in anger or hert, I can not take back the precious gifts, that a woman has given me.
      I see all as it was, at the time we believed in our love

      That is a blessing to be remembered, always
      Now I write, for what may be

      Love you, Rick


  • Cannonsfire
    June 16, 2008
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    Oooh clappies are running away tonight


  • Cannonsfire
    June 16, 2008

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    This is intensely passionate, it would be a cold woman who did not feel this write or the depth of emotions you bring out in it. Romantic and from the heart. Love, C


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Hi-C

      Your a very good reader of my words
      Thank you for feeling it all

      Like your new picture, How nice
      I think Austrilia is in the winter, Yes

      Rick


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Yes my friend, I not only liked it I loved it.
    You can write the most amazing sensual pieces,
    and you do so with pure class. You can write the most beautiful poetry that any real lady would just love.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Hi Joyce


      Sorry I missed you
      Thank you for always liking my writing
      I love your words as well
      Nyla looks real cute

      Love you Hon

      Rick


  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    June 15, 2008

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    My breath is taken away!

    Wow! This was so sensual. So pleasing to the eye. You drew me in with every word. I love the picture, the format of the poem. The coloring you used was soft to my eyes. All around I give you a perfect 10! Honestly you made me wish that I was your lover. That is what I like very tasteful, very pleasing, not nasty at all! Great work here.(You just made a favorite!) In Love & light... Blessed Be! ~~Iridessa MoonFlower~~


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Hi Iridessa

      I would say you like my writing
      It is not often I get to be a Ten, how nice
      I hope you will read some of my favorites on my page
      You are kind to read me
      Thank you for the three smilies

      Rick


  • sapphireangelwings
    June 15, 2008

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    This piece is so incredibly beautiful.....you have proven that enduring love can be filled with passion and sensuality with what you have penned here. The only thing I can suggest is changing the two " there's" in the third stanza to " their's..." and it would be PERFECT! I loved this....going to make it a favorite I think!


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Hi My Friend


      I made the changes
      Thank you so much for showing me that
      I must have been absent from school the day they covered there
      Thank you for saying beautiful

      Rick


  • Stardust-luvr
    June 15, 2008

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    my dearest friend you have brought forth passion to a new and rewarding level by shining its true colors of pure sensuality in all levels of sensual and sensory expression. Dear I have said it many time I am touched by the wonders of your golden heart as it glows with romantic grace and everlasting promise. much love forever always and many blessings evermore xoxoxo Star xoxo


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Hi Star

      I never know how well my thoughts are concieved
      Thank you for appreating my attempt at sensuality
      I have been blessed with many great women
      Now I look to another, to feel my words in life
      Thank you for your kind blessings

      Rick


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    June 15, 2008
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    ...sigh...

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Hi Sandy


      A very all incompassing comment... lol

      I thank you for your ...sigh...

      Rick


  • SandraMVeinot
    June 15, 2008

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    !!!


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Your very modest


      Thank you for the rose
      and the three Smilies

      Rick


  • albymyheart gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    Oh, what a lovely sensual surprise I discovered here this morning from you. Mmmmm... I absolutely love the photo and your poetry caresses her in such a tender loving way, yet passionate and firey.

    Your artful talent with words has made love making into in artform. Just beautiful...alby


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 16, 2008
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      Hi alby


      Your comment was masterfull
      The last words to me were a joy to read
      Sensual can be achieved, by lightly touching the edge of the act
      All of us as adults, can fill in the rest of the dream we call love

      Rick


  • jogn
    June 15, 2008

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    Your right

    This is passion incensed. The beauty of two people enthralled in each other’s being is stylish and alluring. An excellent write, I applaud you.


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Jogn


      I have few male readers
      so it is nice to have you say excellent

      I thank you, and also for the Applauds
      Rick


  • michellemybelle gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    mmmmmmmm
    very nice Mr. Rickie, she said breathlessly...
    Incredibly passionate and seducative. I can invision all of this, feeling your words touching my sensual being. I love the build of sexual tension, the emotion and imagery in this inticing poem. For the 1st time in 3945 comments, I say amazing...lol
    love,
    Michelle


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Michelle

      You are so cute

      For the first time in 3945 comments, I say the word Amazing
      Where have I seen that before. I need a copyrite now... lol
      Nice to be the First

      Nice you like the building of tension
      just what I had in mind as I crafted the words.
      I think love and lust, should come upon us in layers
      otherwise, we are eating the iceing, before we have began

      Thank you for feeling my passion

      Love, Rickie


  • sassykitty
    June 15, 2008

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    I must admit this wasn't what I expected and your photograph almost put me off reading - having said that it's a very, very effective work of sensuality. I like the way the flow and shift works towards that one particular moment where the two become one. The use of direct address and the emotions of the poetic voice are crafted well and this wasn't what I would've connected with the rather unsavoury photograph! Sorry if I sound like a prude but I don't think your really rather good poem needs it!


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Hi Kitty


      You are a sassy kitty, but I like your comment
      Most all of my writtings of love are void of pictures.
      I write much softer than most, forgoing crude details
      for the sake of the beauty of the write,
      letting the reader fill in the blanks by their own treasured memories

      In this, I know the judge wants FIRE, so I gave her a picture

      Your thoughtfull comment is appreated
      and considered a complement

      Rick


  • z etoile
    June 15, 2008

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    I absolutely loved this. I loved how you brought it upon as beauty that was amazing. Thank you for featuring your work and sharing it with us!

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Hi MJ


      What a wonderfull comment
      I so much appreate you reading me

      Rick

  • juno0404
    June 15, 2008

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    "For a moment
    we touch the heavens, together
    and your look of adornment, is all I can see
    I love you, that you gave yourself to me... so completely"
    Love that this is so soft and beautiful, and well written. The passion is there and the fire.
    You did a great job clothing all that passion in such tenderness,,,,,,,,,,,


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Juno

      The last words of your comment mean the most to me
      Tendernes is the halmark of love, and the creator of passion

      In words and in life, it can be like fire and ice
      Most will not exceed a finer feeling

      Thank you for quoting me

      Rick


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 15, 2008
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    Sensual heaven...

    Well...I am a bit breathless here. How deeply erotic...yet so sensually gentle and enticing. How wonderful the abandonment of all inhibitions...as two become one with fever and intoxicating blissful desire. Feeling that deep building of impending glory...that time inbetween, reaching for the heavens most precious gift. I adore this write...I felt it deeply within my sensual being. Most delicate and beautiful! Thank you for the lovely entry!!!

    Blessed Be~


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 15, 2008
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      Hi Suzie


      I wanted to give you wanted
      and still keep to my own soft style.

      I am always amazed and learning, what lites women up

      There is no grand manual... lol
      It is something that must be learned by feel...
      and that my friend, is the pleasure of learning women

      There are few things in this world
      more beautiful, than a moving squirming female

      I will need another lesson soon
      Pleased you liked my words

      Love, Rick


      • SummerlandRayne gold member
        June 15, 2008
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        Yes Rickie...in the interest of furthur education...I too belive it is paramount that you get many future lessons.You know if we don't use it...we loose it. So from a very technical and intellectual stand point...I say USE IT BABY!!!LMAO!!! Seriously...I loved the write and the pic and the impact of the poem in it's "fullness". I may need to quote the lovely Michellemybelle in saying...For the first time in so many comments...I too say...AMAZING!!!


        • Endeavor gold member
          June 15, 2008
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          Your funny Sue... good advice

          I am very solective Sue
          but I am continuing my education
          and new love is all learning and beautiful
          Any woman that touches me, becomes a lasting gift
          and few will forget where I was
          though one may try

          Hope you liked the set-up for this
          Thank you for saying

          Amazing

          Rick


          • SummerlandRayne gold member
            June 15, 2008

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            I am very funny...perhaps I could get my own comedy series...or at least a big badge that reads..."SMART ASS!!!"LOL!!!


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 15, 2008
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    Hey Mr. Hottie!!!

    Let's see some heat!!!LOL!







    I am ing the night away!!!

    Maybe I have had a few 's...yup...I have!LMAO!!!

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