How long have I been in this storm?
I’ve lost all track of time.
I feel overwhelmed by your shadowy form.
You are no longer mine.
Your images wash over me.
I feel that I may drown.
I just need to let this be.
Before I end up six feet under and upside down.
But only you can save me.
You can help me out of the rain.
Lead me to safety
And far away from this pain.
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Not done with this piece yet! Can't figure out where I want to go from here. Any suggestions?
Let Me Have It!
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i like how you made the rhyme work so well in this write. this write kind of reminds me of the way that i used to write a few years ago. it may be similar, but it has a uniqueness that purely yours, never give that away, its what makes your writing yours.
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I like what you have so far. The question I have is how does it end? Do you get the help? Are you ignored? Perhaps, that is where to go....
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Thanks for the suggestions! Something I definitely need to work on. lol
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