Softly,
The hauntingly sweet music washes over me
Waves crashing against the bough
Softly,
It gently lifts my face
The song, it kisses me, affectionately
I surrender to its touch
Softly
Pulling me towards it, I feel a peace within
Water drags down my ship, I care not
Softly
As if in gentle hands I lay
Desire to pull away, I have none,
No sanity, no sense, no control
Softly
To the rocks I am pulled
Wood splinters, a scream I hear, who makes it.
Softly
In deaths arms I now sleep.
A contest entry
- Anything and everything by Fitz1901.
750 points, ended July 22, 2008, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful
Beautiful write, loved it. The imagery was very well done, and you can almost ear and see it like it's happenig. Very well done.
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Creepy and evocative. Very atmospheric. Interesting treatment of death as being something gentle, inevitable, with the pain and fear pushed aside but still there in the background.
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theres something about sirens that draws me in and you drew me in from the start. its haunting, sad with the touch of romance. good luck in the contest.
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Softly
In deaths arms I now sleep.
Wow! what an ending...definately a twist. Great job!
**Master Ktulu**
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What a great poem, I love the repetition of softly, and the subtle build up to the tragic end of the poem.
thanks for entering
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