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Never Had A Love Like This

 

What I yearn for is what you offer me
I've accepted this cherished blessing in my heart
Thankfully, this is not a dream

I anticipate the day we give ourselves away
To each other's hearts
Oh, indeed, what a glorious day
It's your kiss, your touch
The sweet smell of your aroma that keeps me ticking
If I were without you, my heart would stop beating

Let our time together
May it be forever and let us enjoy the time we have
in each other's arms
Whether on horseback or sharing ice cream cones
Or if I'm serenading you and you melt throughout the song

This isn't lust
This is more than love
To me, it's my heart's dedication
To another soul and life I can't live without
and choose to always think about

You're so much more than skin and bones
And sex and emotions to me
I want your breath to be my breath and vice-versa
With you, I'm everything

 

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  • AnnaJayne silver member
    October 1, 2008

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    Charming

    I loved reading this poem, it really is a well written and effective piece of work.

    "I want your breath to be my breath and vice-versa
    With you, I'm everything"

    I particularly love this last line because it rounds off the poem very nicely with a nice heartfelt comment. It's amazing when you love somebody so much that you basically want to be one with them. Well done, I think you expressed your feelings wonderfully.

    Good luck in the contest!


  • XxX-Ivy-Love-XxX
    August 5, 2008
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    very nice. good luck


  • counterculture
    August 5, 2008

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    I thought you were a bit too wordy. I think poetry says a lot when you say a little. The imagery you used was kind of cliche. Although the imagery was a bit cliche in my opinion I thought it worked fairly well.

    • counterculture
      August 5, 2008
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      no I did not think it was a bad poem. I just thought you could have been a bit more original and a little less wordy. I am not saying I am poetry god or something nor do i mean to bash you. I just know from experience that honest criticism helps us all become better poets. Cuz i suck as a poet, but i have gotten better with good criticism.


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      So did it suck or not?

      And honestly, I didn't think it was THAT cliche, I've seen worse.


  • XBeautiful MistakeX
    July 25, 2008

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    Awe this was amzing..It takes allot to share your TRUE feelings with thousands of people. Thank you for entering

    Oz


  • daviscth silver member
    July 20, 2008
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    Thanks....


  • Georgia La Mariposa
    July 15, 2008

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    This was nice I hope Sammi enjoys it. If she even wants to be with me anymore this is great if she doesn't it's just a painful sickening memory.


  • misticmoonlite gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    very pretty, love is what both share and desire to entwine as a whole, you penned this with such softness, thank you for this entry, good luck


  • JustFallingApart
    July 4, 2008

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    how very sweet, it's nice that you love your person for more than sex and emotions, there are not as many people like that now, thanks for entering


  • Angelflower
    July 1, 2008

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    This was really beautiful!!! I really love the image that you created it was just so sweet and loving!! For some reason while I was reading this I saw a picture of this being played as a song to the one this was written for being played in a park or by the ocean at evening..It was so soft and beautiful.. thank you very much for sharing this with me.. Best of luck..


    Angel


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    What a wonderful collection of memories and a message of love to the special someone. You penned a magnificent piece.


  • Lady Voldemort silver member
    June 13, 2008
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    ....you say you don't write about things that have happened to you? sheesh. you coulda fooled me...

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