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Balcony Whispers

On balcony,
soft lavender silk
fell from shoulders,

pampered, delicate fingers,
wove around crystal stem,

thin as silvery kisses


Raspberry lips,
pressed lightly,

sipped,

released,

returning stained glass
to table









Author notes

Prompt: To write a poem about patience,
and not as a virtue, please.

A contest entry

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  • Ithica silver member
    June 23, 2008

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    I hope she doesn't have to wait too long...??? The patience of a conscientious imbiber will still blur the edges of sobriety... eventually??? hehe!!!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    Stunning poem
    Words of colour, softly written in the delicacy of images
    that the reader can only imagine
    Julie


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 13, 2008

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    oh this was lovely Such a wonderfully sensual daydream.


    Delila


  • Cannonsfire
    June 12, 2008

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    To drink and wait alone that would never do Love, C


  • Carolina Moon gold member
    June 12, 2008

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    You write so beautifully. I really love this and the way you display it. Best of luck in the contest!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    June 12, 2008

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    There is a soft delicate ply to this piece that resonates patience, the waiting, the building into finer things. Your line breaks slow the pace beautifully.

    Patience - getting there...

    Well done my friend. ~Pamela

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