Still silky
petals
lay where they fell
dying ~
like her heart
and her love
for him...
fading
to
dust...
In a list
A contest entry
- A red rose by Angelo di Luce.
480 points, ended June 24, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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You have got the free verse bug.I have to say though that you do it beautifully.Well done, Ros
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That's really beautiful and avoids being hackneyed. You would think it might be, considering the images you've used (rose, heart, dust, etc.) but it isn't at all.
Good luck in the contest.
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A strong message expressed in short time!!!!!!! That is magnificent!!!! I enjoyed this read!!!!!!!! Best wishes in the contest!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This is beautifully realised--form and content complement each other perfectly. Exquisitely done.
Bill
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This is wonderfully well written! Bravo!
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Rose of love!
Silky
Petals
Glowing fresh
With new life,
Like her heart
In love
For him
In star
Dust!
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Beautifully said Sue! I think many of us can relate to this!!
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So much said in a few words
Thank you.
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