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My Love

Its wonderful,
to feel this way.
I love you so,
My handsome prince.

I'm ready to feel your kiss.
be held in your arms,
but for this I shall wait.

distance can't hurt something,
so perfect.
You have become my life,
my rose amongst the thorns.

I will never give you up,
my love you shall keep,
till the day I say "I do".

Author notes

this is for my fiance, Mac, my true love


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  • PonyPride
    June 20, 2008

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    I really like the emotion and power that you have devoloped in this poem. However, I think that with a little work it can be much better. Now, please dont take any of my comments as an insult because they are not meant to be that way.

    First of all, I think this peice would be better suited in a centered alignment. But I would also reccomend altering the grammer in some spaces like during these lines:
    Im ready to feel your kiss,
    to be held in your arms,
    but for this I shall wait,
    distance can't hurt something,
    so perfect.

    I think what you are saying is beautiful but it would be better if you broke it up a bit.

    Like I would put a period after wait. And start anew at the next line.

    I would also put a period next to kiss and then start new at But.

    I love the imagery throughout and the passion, good work. And if you decide to change this up please let me know so I can take another look


  • Pretty Britty
    June 12, 2008
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    This is sweet but
    I have to ask
    is this a long distance relationship?
    I'm all sorts of curious.