Finally the long avoided conversation-
the words that were needed were tearfully spoken.
We faced the hard facts without reservation,
and left our hearts empty, bleeding, and broken.
I'm so very sorry that our world fell apart;
We hung on to the end with a sad desperation.
I know you'll always live deep down in my heart-
So I cry, and as the train leaves the station
you blow me
kisses in the wind.
Author notes
Prompt is "kisses in the wind"
A contest entry
- AMAZE ME!!!!! by Sue Cardwell.
1000 points, ended June 18, 2008, 24 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A Million Ways To Say Good Bye by 2lullabyhaven.
775 points, ended July 7, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Peer Pressure Contest!! You decide the trophy winners!! by Zenda-Lokki.
1700 points, ended January 7, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow I think this poem is my favourte from the poems you have entered. The ryhme scheme worked perfectly and you managed to keep its beat all the way through. Just great poetry good luck in the contest.
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It reminds me of this movie I saw once, where the woman is leaving on a train and her lover is standing on the platform, watching it pull out...and she leans out the window and blows a kiss to him. Lovely. =)
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Sad and simple, and easy to relate to, this is a good take on the prompt, I think. I see you won a few trophies with this one- congratulations. Its a sweet sad little poem. Thank you for entering.
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It was an okay read.
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Very good
nicely written
full of emotion and saddness, very well written
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deep emotion in this piece dear poet. If words could weep, I do believe that these would be doing just that. Excellent piece ~Bret~
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Ahhh... a well deserved Gold trophy for this realistic poem. Congratulations !
Your well written poem carries that feeling of knowing it's over and being able to accept it. Good job
Dee
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Very poetical, really; thanks for your entry and good luck lol
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Tender touching fare well. A well constructed verse of the sky rockets punge when all fails and crashes in finality of realizations of "never meant to be".
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i would like to congraqtulate you on a well written poem and on the silver trophy that you have earned in this contest as well. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Thank you Russell for this poem in my contest, you have captured the prompt perfectly. Many tearful goodbyes on platforms, snatched kisses through the windows and a sadness...wondering... and Kisses in the wind sum it up beautifully.
Congratulations on the silver, unfortunately I'm only allowed one gold, Kevin's rules
I loved this...thank you...Sue x
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Thank you so much for the kind words, Sue....and for the trophy as well!
This was a good contest, with some excellent poetry. I am honored.
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Thank you for this very sad entry in my contest, I enjoyed it very much.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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So many heartbreaks coming out of this contest...I love your rhyme and it ended with a sign of love anyway, blowing kisses from the train as it leaves..
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